Blood Tears (Chapter 2)

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My crew and I strolled down the halls of the large building; shopping at our favorite stores and goofing off at the arcade. By the time our fun was over it was 9:50, “Wow it’s getting late,” I stated, staring down at my cell phone’s clock, “The mall closes in 10 minuets.”
Kate nodded in agreement, “Yeah, I think we should go, Zoe, Clair you coming?”
Zach walked up beside me, holding me in his arms for awhile before kissing me lightly on the cheek, “You leaving, Ari?’
“Yup, I have to take the girls home, but if you want…,” I trailed off giving him a knowing look, “You can come with us.”
He let out a hearty laugh, “As tempting as that sounds babe, I have to go home with Brady.”
“ Yeah, I’m kidnapping your man, Sweetie, sorry.” joked Brady, wrapping his arm around my boyfriend and messed up his hair with the other.
Clair grabbed Brady by his hoodie and pulled him closer to her before clamming his lips as hers’ again, “Don’t do anything I would do baby.” she called after him as he faded into the river of bodies, fighting their way out the glass doors.
“ I better go follow him shouldn't I?’ asked Zach
I shrugged and kissed his soft lips one last time, “Yeah, you probably should.” he flashed me his shiny white smile before kissing me again and disappearing after his friend, “I love you!” he called out behind him.
“I love you too.”
The car ride home was quite with all my friends snoring softly around me, ‘They really had a busy day.’ I smirked to myself at the sight of Kate and Clair cuddling up together. I would die for my girls no matter what, but moments like this made me remember why I was so protective of them. As I pulled up in Kates’ driveway I undid my belt and turned around, “Kate, wake up.” I whispered, poking her lightly on the arm.
She strewed slightly in her seat as her eyes fluttered open, “Ari, what’s up?” she asked still in a daze as she sat up and yawned, “Am I home already?’
“Yup, want me to walk you to the door?”
She shook her head, whipping her long red waves of hair around her face, “No, I’ll be fine, thanks though.” she assured me before getting out of the car and stumbling to her porch, “ Bye guys!” she waved as she stepped into the house.
The next stop on my list was Clair, She was already awake when we pulled up to her apartment, “Thanks for the ride girly.” she said as she stepped in front of my door and gave me hug bye, “Tell Zoe to call me when she gets home, Brady and I might have found her a date.”
“Really, that’s great, who?” I asked my excitement getting the better of me.
Clair just laughed, “Chill I’ll tell you, it’s Max Road, from the drama club that she’s in.”
“Oh, He’s Cute!” I could feel my face glowing brighter and brighter at the thought of Max and Zoey dating, “They would be perfect together.”
Clair nodded just as excited as I was, “I know, that’s why next Friday, we’re planning a triple date.”
“A triple date?” I asked, a little confused at her plans.
“Yeah; you, Zack, Max, Zoey, Brady and I are going out to Apple’Bs and then to a movie, it’ll be great!”
I nodded slowly, still a bit clueless at how this was going to get Zoey hooked up with Max, “Umm…Okay.” I started, picking my words carefully, “I guess it’ll be fun.”
She smiled brightly, her perfect white teeth shining in the moon light, she reminded me of a Greek goddess, “Great, I’ll give you a call sometime this week.” she flung her arms tightly around my neck and squeezed, suffocating me.
“Clair…I-I can’t b-breath.” I chocked, pulling her grip lose so that I could escape her hug.
She let go quickly and blushed a dark shade of pink, “Sorry.” she muttered.
“So’ Kay, but I better go, before Zoey gets too impatient ( and before you hug me to death.)” as I spook Zoey leaned on the horn. Clair and I chuckled as we parted our ways.




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This story's getting better. I like the relationships and friendships that are formed. Just remember to show not tell sometimes. This means that instead of saying for e.g "She was nervous" you could say "Her heart accelerated and she started shuffling her feet. Also i would say try to make all of the girls different to each other. Make them have their own little traits so that we don't get confused between them.
"You grow, you grow like tornado
You grow from the inside
Destroy everything through
Destroy from the inside
Erupt like volcano
You flow from the inside
You kill everything through
You kill from the inside"




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Hey any chance you can help by reviewing my work. I only joined this site yesterday and nobody had reviewed anything for me...
"You grow, you grow like tornado
You grow from the inside
Destroy everything through
Destroy from the inside
Erupt like volcano
You flow from the inside
You kill everything through
You kill from the inside"




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:D :D Wow...I just :elephant: :elephant: adore this story...I can't wait to read more!!!
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"How do you escape from yourself?"
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Hmmmm, it was okay. little short but still good. I like the friendship between the girls and the guys are funny. lol. But I have the feeling something bad is going to happen soon. I can't wait to read more. XD!!
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