One Mistake

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One mistake
That's all it takes

My world turns upside down
As I fall to the ground

I did not do those things
Yet you accuse me falsely

You are the puppeteer pulling my heartstrings
Believing your one and only theory

I lied to you before
But this time I mean exactly what I say

As the ash floats down beside me
Your anger, the fire burning in front of my face

You don't believe me
Saying my lies are a disgrace
L!llY Masacre!




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Most of the times it only takes one great line for me to love a poem, one line that leaves me breathless.
You had that one line ;).

You are the puppeteer pulling my heartstrings


That one just got me and made me read your poem with even more concentration.

This one also really touched me:

As the ash floats down beside me
Your anger, the fire burning in front of my face


Good work, girl! Love to read more from you.
I live in my wonderland, created by myself and inhabited by my creations.




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i liked that poem. i agree with the one above me. (forgot the name) but this was really good. I liked that line about the anger being a fire in front of your face. That was really good imagery. It drew me in too :D I do not see anything wrong with it. Good job! ^_^
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i liked your poem a lot it gives out of emotion
tells a story about what you feel
great job keep writin



"Who am I? I'm just a writer. I write things down. I walk through your dreams and invent the future."
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