UPDATE: Timestone Realities P2

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PART 1
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Brea was in the middle of the highway again, screaming with one hand shielding her eyes from the glare of the oncoming truck. She was there--she was gone. The screams stayed though in the dining room, where she next found herself. She felt the suffocating weight of the silence seconds before the fork in her hand clattered to the floor and she found the pale faces of her family gaping at her.

She gasped. Her relief at having blinked out of that nightmare unscathed was quickly replaced with a ghastly rush of aches and pain just around her shoulder and her wrists. He'd touched her again. Him, who'd replayed a particular scenario one too many times.

Somewhere she heard a familiar horn blare. This time she'd been taken painful seconds further into the nightmare. As close as death would have her without devouring the soul.

She averted her eyes and excused herself from the table. Eyes followed her but no one complained. They wouldn't miss the psychotic daughter, her parents. But hell, the looks on their faces made her want to laugh until her stomach ached.

"You've bruised me again," she complained to the air, while rubbing the back of her neck. He was inside her somewhere. She could feel the weight of him burdening her and she couldn't take it anymore. Not the pain, the horror, or the insanity of it all. She'd been reduced to a mere puppet in the last month, having him control her without her consent.

You're not listening, he said in the barest of whispers.

"I am!" she snapped. "Just tell me why I always die at the end."

He sighed and she felt her chest rise with it. He was so close, always a part of her, his thoughts and emotions mixing with her own.

Because you die, Brea. Always, leaving me behind no matter what I try. I can't have you die this time. Then he said the word she detested. The Timestone…

"I won't get it." Her voice was neutral, though she was shivering from the fear of returning to the highway. He could sense her every emotion just as she could his. How had they been fused like this? He'd done it, she knew that. With his cursed piece of the Timestone. And what did he want from her?

"You don't know me. Stop pretending you do."

I love you Brea, he said simply.

She panicked at that. Her defiant side said, "Is that what you do to your lovers in this parallel universe of yours? Make them commit suicide over and over?" He ached at her bitter words. She felt the pain in her chest.

No, he said. That was all you. And he was silent.

It was a whole week before Brea felt him stir.

She was in the café near campus. Briefly, she felt his panic at her decision to catch up on homework. He exploded when Brea checked her watch for the date and time.

Do not walk into that café, Brea, he said sharply.

She ignored him and ordered her coffee and donuts. The boy at the counter winked at her when he caught her cursing at her invader. He smiled when she scowled, which was how Brea noticed just how handsome he was. The dazzling smile lit up his face.

"Fighting your inner demons?" he asked playfully.

She cleared her throat to respond, but the voice in her head grew obnoxiously loud.

Brea! She winced and stomped away without a single word.

"Get out," she ordered. "Leave. Or I swear I'll get some psychic to pull you out. Even if I have to put myself through torture." He'd manage to suppress his fury until those words. Without notice, Brea was taken back to the highway. Her heart dropped down to her stomach. She tried to move without success, the rain soaking her. The traffic light on the bridge above her flashed yellow and then red. She knew it would hit green and then…

Brea slipped on the cold, wet concrete. No, she didn't; he made her. The truck came racing, the deafening blare of the horn following suit. She screamed, her throat raw. Seconds before impact, she felt him grabbing her wrist and yanking her out of the way and into him. This was the only time he left her for a body of his own.

Before she could glare up at him, she was back at the café and staring instead at the boy with honey coloured curls resting about his forehead. He wasn't smiling now, but looked entirely worried.

She gasped as if she'd been underwater for minutes. She'd learned the first how not to breathe during these jumps in his memories. Or hers? She could never tell and he refused to explain without using the word Timestone.

"Water?" the boy asked. She gulped it down within seconds before she was graced with another smile that took her breath away.

"Thanks…"

"I'm Dawn by the way."

She nodded and smiled at him. "Thank you, Dawn."

"You must be Brea?" He took the seat across from her. His knee brushed hers sending a electric vibe through her. But it was him who shivered.

She frowned. "Yes, but how--?"

He waved a hand at the open notebook in front of her. Once white, the paper there was now a sickly black from all the ink strokes spelling her name repeatedly. She groaned. The writing was hers, but not the words.

Brea, Brea, Brea, her invader chanted. For the first time, she felt as if she was inside his body instead of the other way around. He wasn't aware of her at all. No, he was mourning.

Mourning for her.

She saw it clearly now, his secret. She was there on the road. Everything was exactly the same, except she no longer stood paralyzed, awaiting her death. Through him she felt the ice of her flesh. Blood was everywhere: on his hands, in her hair. And holding her, crying warm tears down her neck was her invader.

When she saw him, it was through the eyes of the dying Brea and so the image was blurry and distorted. This Brea wanted to reach out and touch him, kiss his lips, but she couldn't move.

Come back! he cried. Please, Brea. I love you. I'm sorry. Come back--

"Come back." Fingers snapped in her face. "Earth to Brea," Dawn said.

Brea started sobbing and soon the tears pooled in her eyes. It was too painful being there with him. She saw everything in fast forward. How Brea had loved him and he her, but then because of some petty fight, he'd stopped seeing her and she'd been unable to confront him. The night she'd walked out onto the highway had been the same one he'd
spent reading up on the Timestone. He remembered it clearly.

Dawn's arms were around her when she stopped crying. For now the voice was silent, but she wanted more. She wanted it to disappear forever and leave her the future.

"Will you kiss me, Dawn?" she asked, once they'd spent hours and hours discussing what they did on various days of the week. He hadn't once looked at her like she was a psycho let alone mention her breakdown. She could have kissed him for that. She wanted to. And might as well while the voice wasn't around to make it painful. She understood he wanted her back no matter what. She wasn't having it.

"It'd be a pleasure," Dawn said an instant before their lips met in blissful satisfaction. Brea felt some broken part of her click into place, making her whole.



[continued...]

Read PART 2 just below :arrow:
Last edited by turity on Mon Nov 02, 2009 1:18 am, edited 3 times in total.
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WOW.
So this review is going to suck. Just a fair warning. xD

I was totally engrossed in your story that I didn't even look for mistakes. I loved how it was confusing, but you could continue reading and still grasp what was going on in the story.

"You must be Brea?" He took the seat across from her. His knee brushed hers sending a electric vibe through her. But it was him who shivered.


That part confused me, but once I read it again it made sense.

Anyways, I'm sorry if this review sucks. I really liked your story!
*gold star*

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I have to agree. Wow. You wrote "continued" at the bottom, are you going to continue? (Please please please please do!)

Just one question: I was a little confused on why the voice didn't want her to go into the cafe. Was it because of Dawn? That was my only (random) question.

One more thing:

For now the voice was silent, but she wanted more. She wanted it to disappear forever and leave her the future.


How can she want more and want it to disappear?


Overall... amazing, amazing, amazing. Great job!

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Thanks guys (esp. Fraggle for the gold star)! I'm glad you liked the first half of my short story. Yes, there is a second part, but I didn't want to make the post too long so I decided to hold back on it. I'll post it soon though =)), so you can bet this isn't the end. Some of your questions might be answered then and if not then I'm going to go back and edit to make it less confusing.
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Hihi, what can I say?
I've never liked this style of fantasy, and felt seriously repulsed when reading some pages of Stephanie Mayer's stuff, but although I am not a fan of this sub-genre, you seem to be top notch as an author.
Very good shift between the two 'come back!' words said by the mistery man, and Dawn. Really, great bursts of style, and although the plot itself leaves me cold, thats just me, I know there millions in this world who would love it!
she got a dazed impression of a whirling chaos in which steel flashed and hacked, arms tossed, snarling faces appeared and vanished, and straining bodies collided, rebounded, locked and mingled in a devil's dance of madness.
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Here's PART 2 to this short...please let me know what you think =)). Thanks in advance!
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The next day, she woke up to the most brilliant sky she'd ever seen. Fluffy clouds littered the blue stretch above. She kept smiling to herself without reason and wasn't even aware of it until her sister pointed it out at breakfast, with a derisive snort.

"It's love, isn't it?" Lily asked sarcastically. Her eyes popped out of there sockets when Brea smiled in confirmation. She pushed away her coffee and toast with a "It's not funny, Brea!" The door was slammed behind her speedy exit.

When Brea met Dawn at the beach that afternoon, she was acutely aware of the invader watching the boy with an eagle's eye. He wasn't speaking to her--something of a miracle.

Dawn kissed her again and again, and she couldn't seem to get enough of him either. He let his fingers trail down her arm, and Brea found herself holding back a laugh at her invader's confused and sometimes wicked thoughts. He couldn't for the life of him understand what it was he was feeling.

"Jealousy," she enlightened him.

That's not it, he said confidently. I just don't understand how everything can be…so different when viewed from the other side.

Brea frowned. "Meaning?"

I thought it was only me who felt that way about you, he told her. When this only complicated the matter he said, I wanted to save you the heartache, Brea. But now you'll have to reach the trap before you turn to me for the solution. Then he waited patiently for hours, until Dawn pulled out something from his pocket and handed it to Brea.

"What is it?" she asked. Her breath caught when the weight of the silver stone was placed in her palm.

"A Timestone," Dawn explained. "It was my great grandmother's. Her log said it has special powers. It connects parallel universes together, like a second reality. She called it the Timestone Realities. I could talk to you years in the future or past if I wanted to. But you wouldn't know me. Isn't it amazing? How many different Breas are there? I want to kiss them all!" he laughed.

Brea felt like she was drowning. Her breathing seized and she stared at Dawn with such sadness, he instantly pulled her against his chest. She started shaking and though no tears found them on her cheeks, she was crying inside like a storm was raging. Her invader was crying along for what Brea now knew was both their loss. They cried together until his memories took her to the highway.

The dead Brea was looking up at the dark sky. She thought the face inches from her was that of an angel, he was so beautiful. Brea gasped for air but there was only a bitter metallic scent polluting everything.

Come back, Dawn cried. Please, Brea. I love you. I'm sorry.

She smiled up at him, knowing the truth at last. He had loved her and he was sorry. What more could she ask for in this last minute before her soul abandoned her? But these were all the other Brea's thoughts.

"Dawn?" she whispered, returning to the beach. Two voices answered and it was then, with that simultaneous occurrence that she realized the invader's identity.

I tried to stop you from going through it again, Dawn said from inside. All I want is for us to be together like this forever. Brea blinked back tears as she gazed at the Dawn in front of her. You have to kill him, Brea. We'll be one then, him and I.

Brea pushed away from the hand resting against her cheek.

"No!" she screamed.

Take the Timestone from him, Brea.

"I'm sorry, Brea," Dawn said. "I'll put it back." He started to pocket the silver stone, but from somewhere within her the other Dawn launched forward and snatched the stone away.

"Go away!" Brea wanted to tell the invader, instead, she saw Dawn's expression fall with a deep sorrow she couldn't bear. But it was also his face and she wanted nothing to do with it.

The stone still in her hands, Brea ran as fast as she could, past the trees over the boulders and straight for the single lane road ahead. Dawn was close on her heel but she didn't even pause at the intersection. A car braked just in time for her to cross, so she was saved that agony. At this point, she didn't care much. She just had to run, get away to somewhere she couldn't see him or hear him. Both of them.

She heard another car's screeching tires behind her and then a familiar blaring horn. Brea froze when something like a forgotten memory flashed before her. It was her getting hit by the truck--that's what the pain was like. Except it wasn't her, really. It was Dawn. He was screaming and bleeding just like she'd been long ago.

Brea spun around to have the images confirmed. The car had skirted off the road and into the boulders, but the driver was alright. He was looming over Dawn's body, frantically glancing about him for help.

Brea ran to her Dawn. The one truly there, who'd held her and kissed her with a passion that filled her to the core.

Good, Brea, the invader said. If you can't kill him, then let me have him. Use the stone. Save him--save us. Brea did so without question. She couldn't let Dawn die. It just wouldn't happen. It was her death he'd embraced and she was going to steal it back.

Remember I love you. If it doesn't work, just hold on to that.

"I love you too," Brea whispered to them both, before the glow of the stone under her palm erupted into a burst of silver light, engulfing her.

Time spun away from her. It went in circles that never ended. It stretched out in many parallel lines that never met, until Brea left the real world for the solitude of the one encased inside the Timestone. White, sinewy strings of time faced her. She closed her eyes, running her hand over them, as if playing a harp.

The music shattered her from inside and she fell into an abyss, spinning too, just as time was.

The brilliant light faded and when Brea opened her eyes it was to find the face she loved most smiling at her, his eyes twinkling.

"Dawn?" She wanted to ask if he was okay, but one glance around the café had her mind reeling. "How--?"

"Shh," he put a finger to her lips. "You did it, Brea."

Brea was confused. Who was the boy sitting across from her? The Dawn she loved or the one she had once loved in another reality? But then again, which string of time did she now occupy?

When he leaned across to kiss her though, she became certain it was her Dawn. Whichever one it was, he was hers--to keep. She looked into the silver of his eyes, but for the love of her she couldn't remember what was so familiar about them.

"What were we discussing?" she asked, trying to give him her full attention.

One quick mischievous grin and he pulled out a silver stoned ring, kissed it and said, "I believe it had something to do with the Timestone Realities."

Brea smiled and let him slip the ring onto her finger, even as a part of her died in another reality.
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