What is love?

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What is love? We give it to others and others give it to us. But after years of loving, that single person will rip out your heart with only three words. Those words are I hate you.

You will be heartbroken, or the person who you told it to will be heartbroken as well. No one will listen as you plead for help. They will just stare at you as if this happens every day. And it does.

But love is not only bad, it also has good powers. It can make you laugh, kiss, and have a great time. It can also make you cry, scream, or just get mad at the whole world.

And that, is love.




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Cassie9960 wrote:What is love? We give it to others and others give it to us. But after years of loving, that single person will rip out your heart with only three words. Those words are I hate you.

You will be heartbroken, or the person who you told it to will be heartbroken as well. No one will listen as you plead for help. They will just stare at you as if this happens every day. And it does.

But love is not only bad, it also has good powers. It can make you laugh, kiss, and have a great time. It can also make you cry, scream, or just get mad at the whole world.

And that, is love.




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Hi, Cassie.
I like the idea behind your poetry. Most people don't write about that side of love.

Cassie9960 wrote: But after years of loving, that single person will rip out your heart with only three words. Those words are I hate you.

After years of loving,
A person will rip out your heart.
With only three words.
I hate you.


Instead of sentences and paragraphs, poetry is written in lines and stanzas. The lines are usually about the same length, creating rhythm, whereas some of your lines are much longer than the rest.

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"One voice can be stronger than a thousand voices, " Captain Kathryn Janeway




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This is what I call small but mighty! Totally thought provoking.

I was particularly pleasantly surprised by the fact that it didn't have any unnecessary dreaminess. Sometimes poems are like that and they lose their appeal. I also like the fact that you didn't seem to be making any effort to make ryhmes with words. Trust me it ahs a rythm of its own.

I must agree with the correction on the way you wrote it though. It really doesn't make it look good. I'm learning that structure affects our writing more than we know. So I think it will be wise to work on that.

Happy writing.




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Alrighty, I'm here Cassie. Okay. Well as someone previously stated, poems are written in lines. That may have been just from the way you posted it in here, but it should look like:
What is love?
We give it to others
and others give it to us.
But after years of loving,
that single person
will rip out your heart
with only three words.
Those words are I hate you.

You will be heartbroken,
or the person who you told it to
will be heartbroken as well.
No one will listen as you plead for help.
They will just stare at you
as if this happens every day.
And it does.

But love is not only bad,
it also has good powers.
It can make you laugh,
kiss,
and have a great time.
It can also make you cry,
scream,
or just get mad at the whole world.

And that, is love.


Okay. This was definitely powerful. And I love how you focused on the negative, but then traded to the positive. It flowed. Very nicely. Also, when written the way I showed you, the first letter is always capitalized in each line. Just saying. Again, I'm not a poet so I do not have any criticism for you. I did enjoy reading this.

-Jayleigh :elephant:
"Only love heals. Anger, guilt, and fear can only destroy and separate you from your true capabilities."-Damen




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great poem thought it expressed great emotion and had great flow




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That was a touching poem.




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This side of love is very intriguing, it shows a different point of view. It was shocking how powerful it was and the amount of emotion was enveloped in it. I think that there would be more flow to it if you put in stanza's. You could definitely base a story or even just lengthen this poem. It was breathtaking.
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