~*It Is What It Is*~

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BAD CHICKS


"A bad chick is someone who handles
her own business without makeing it seem
like business." - Sister Souljah


Your bad chick isn't the girl with the nice hands, putting every one in her way out. The bad chick is the "mommy." The girl who drives them guys crazy, gets wifed up by them high rollers, and walks around with no shame because she know she controls the game. See a bad chick lets people know who she is and what she's about. Fellahs can come, but she'll tell the ones with no type of benefits to go.


Only idiot little girls let love get them delirious, to where they let things that really count go. For example, a guy looks good to you. Inside you think "yes - this is all mine!" Then you realize he's not wearing a watch and has no car keys (big possibility he has no life and no job). He's broke !


A bad chick may use him for one thing, but beside that he's no good and must get thrown back. Never get the bad chick confused for the hood or street worker. Its a full-time job being a bad chick. Understand the common diva will hate her and guys will love her, but dont ever think to test her because she is a bad chick. :)


By, Kissena "Ladee" Robinson
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I noticed a lot of punctuation errors, but that is it technically. I also noticed that the title had nothing to do with the poem. I liked it a lot, and thought it had an okay message, and almost made me ashamed since I am kind of an "idiot little girl" when it comes to guys. That's how good this poem was.
Shakespearian tongue-twister:

To sit in solemn silence
In a dark, dank dock
In a pestilential prison
With a lifelong lock;
Awaiting the sensation
Of a short, sharp shock
Of a cheap, chippy chopper
On a big black block.




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Hi Ladee, and welcome to the Young Writers' Society!

First things first, I'm not sure this is a poem. It seems just like a little speech. I mean, there was no underlying metaphor, no line breaks were evident, and the sentences are all complete -- three elements of common prose.

To fix this up a bit, just read it through. Put an apostrophe in the word "don't." Punctuate your quotations correctly. Don't put a space before an exclamation point. Stuff like that.

Overall, good work! I'm clueless on the subject, so I can't help you much there. I liked the dialect and the slang -- it gave the work a nice effect. Keep writing!



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