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bookaholicgirl · 2009-07-20T02:31:56Z

Alone. I wear a disguise Chameleon Blend into the lies Quiet Can't make a sound Disappear Or I will be found Withdraw I've attained my goal Invisibility But I have an unrelenting hole Incomplete It threatens to swallow me Abyss It won't set me free Pain It remains an aching in my chest Heart I am constantly depressed Soul Something's missing Someone But no one is listening Oblivious No one can see Invisible I can no longer be me Ghost My disguise Has become my demise.

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Fri Sep 18, 2009 5:50 pm

Insanaca Guitarist says... · Fri Sep 18, 2009 5:50 pm

Wow. That is absolutely brilliant! Please keep up the AWESOME work! :smt003

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Fri Sep 18, 2009 8:05 pm

MissMiaFacinelli says... · Fri Sep 18, 2009 8:05 pm

Wow. This is a really awesome, poignant poem!

Just make sure that you punctuate the end of every line, to give your readers a chance to breathe! Try reading it out loud - it's a great way to check the flow, and pauses.

I really like your style!

Keep writing!

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