The Weight of Empty

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This is not written in my normal style, but is a collaborative effort of a friend and myself. Inspired by our own experience in the darkness*, with the hope of spreading light through metaphor and hope.

*Dedicated to all who are suffering from addictions, disorders, abuse, and unhealthy relationships, thinking patterns, habits.
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Where there is No Love, there is No Question.

A dream shared becomes reality, a dream alone is a nightmare.

"She tastes lyke raiyn
and sumtimes kiwi-fruit;
and wunce...
she tasted lyke a pen-ny." <3




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Thank you for taking the time to critique.
Last edited by Mandorelute on Mon Jul 27, 2009 12:49 am, edited 1 time in total.
Where there is No Love, there is No Question.

A dream shared becomes reality, a dream alone is a nightmare.

"She tastes lyke raiyn
and sumtimes kiwi-fruit;
and wunce...
she tasted lyke a pen-ny." <3




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ok!! WOW. Too much text for one post. Please can you attach this as a file as I really can't edit it like this. I would like to give you a critique though, pm me when you change this format

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I read a little and it seems really good. Please make this an attachment so it's easier to critique!
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she got a dazed impression of a whirling chaos in which steel flashed and hacked, arms tossed, snarling faces appeared and vanished, and straining bodies collided, rebounded, locked and mingled in a devil's dance of madness.
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*will review this piece on the weekend.*
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I'll try and review this, but you know...Semester Finals are coming up, so sorry if I don't get to it!
Sorrow lasts through this night
I'll take this piece of you,
and hold for all eternity
For just one second I felt whole... as you flew right through me.


~Sorrow by Flyleaf



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