My Old Friend

There you are, my old friend.
My, how I have missed
You so much.
I'm glad you're back.

I almost forgot you.
I'm terribly sorry.
You were gone for quite
Some time; Why?

My happiness is slowly
Returning, though there are
Some rough places.
Will you be here for those?

For a moment, I thought my
Heart was healed again.
Your presence has made
Me think twice, though.

I'd forgotten that you cannot
Put back together what is
So badly damaged.
Mangled, really.

You reminded me that
My happiness is still
Out of reach.
Thank you, old friend.

My, my, I have missed
That breaking feeling
In my chest that only
You can give me.

My, my, sweet sorrow;
Such misery as this.
I do hope that you will
Not abandon me too
When all else is amiss.

I like this, I do think there is some ryme to it though, is there supposed to be? I think there should be on or the other if so haha. Anyway I do like this, it really gives emotion.

This is a good poem, but I feel that it is lacking some depth. You tell a very moving story, but I can't relate very well. In poetry, you don't have that much space to tell a story, so you want to involve the reader as much as possible. That's why you should show a lot more than tell in a poem. Try to make us feel the heartbreak, feel the agony the speaker is going through, the bittersweet reunion, make our emotions twist and churn.

There you are, my old friend.

My, how I have missed

You so much.

I'm glad you're back.

The 'much' in the third line kind of breaks the flow. I think you should remove it.

My happiness is slowly

Returning, though there are

Some rough places.

Rough places sounds quite strange, in my opinion. What places are you talking about? Places where there is no happiness? Or times when there is no happiness?

I'd forgotten that you cannot

Put back together what is

So badly damaged.

Mangled, really.

The 'really' at the end is a bit awkward. It doesn't flow that well, so I think you should rewrite this verse.

Then, I agree with Flower~Child. At the last verse, there is a bit of a rhyme. It sounds a little odd when compared to the rest of the poem, especially given that it has five lines in it as opposed to the four used in the other verses. It may or may not have been intentional, but I think you should get rid of the rhyme.

The overall poem seems a little scattered. There are some lines that ldon't ink to each other, and at times, it is as if you threw in a line or two just to add something to the poem. Try reworking this a little, maybe fixing things a bit towards the end. If you have any questions about this review, then don't hesitate to PM me.

This poem is rather emotional, but gives a sense of sadness to it as well. In some ways it gives the impression the person writing may be going mad. is it supposed to e like that? Even so, I thought it was a good poem - keep it up!

This poem is rather emotional, but gives a sense of sadness to it as well. In some ways it gives the impression the person writing may be going mad. Is it supposed to be written like that? Even if it isn't, the poem touched on many emotions. I like how it suggested the girl - or boy, come to think of it - was left alone by everyone else. A powerful use of emotion here. I thought it was a good poem, but perhaps a tad short - keep writing!

This poem is really good, i thought the stanzas were really well thought out. But i do have one TINY problem with this. The last two stanzas first sentences match and the rest of the first sentences dont. It just seems really out of place. If you would like to say the same type of sentence again, try to reword it to match the rest of the poem. But i thought this had really good emotions involved in it Keep up the good work.

Overall I thought the poem flowed very well. I really like how you worded it in the end. I would just like to say that at the very beginning it starts off a little rocky. The words don't exactly flow together, you use such simple words at the beginning that they seem a bit choppy to me but as you get more into the poem it really starts to pick up and flow quite nicely. Great Job!

I don't think this flowed very well - some of the lines sounded a little disjointed. I did like the last stanza though and I think if you could rework the other stanzas to make them perhaps rhyme or flow as well as that stanza, it would sound much better. I also think that the content of the poem is a little vague and I would like to see more depth to it, more description, perhaps imagery, development of characters, etc. We know how the speaker feels but I would like to know more about why the speaker feels this way and what happened to make them feel like this. Keep writing.

This poem is very emotional, but while I think you mean for it to be sad it seems almost like the writer is mad. Some lines seem to rhyme But i don't see a single rhyme scheme in the whole thing I think you should pick one or the other. It seems to be almost. Most of it flows very well although i think the last line seems a little choppy here:
I do hope that you will
Not abandon me too
but i love the way you worded it. All in all really good poem

The poem was good, but a little rough in some spots that I had to reread more than twice. Good luck liked it a lot!