Emily Hope Ridings

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Emily Hope Ridings


I love how you look
I love how you laugh
It makes me complete
just looking at you
I know I am just
your aunt but,
I feel like your
sister or maybe
even your mother,
I can't explain the feeling
I get when I listen to you talk
It gives me hope and joy
when it seems like there is
none to be found
You have a power
over us
we can't help
but be happy when we are near
we love to watch you grow
even though we cry
we celebrate a baby growing
and going away
to her father's arms she goes
away from us
for what feels like etternity
when it is only two years
you don't know this
for you are too little
to understand
that you will sorely be missed
not just by grandma and grandpa
but by me
you may not see a tear
shed but on the inside
I am dieing to see your mother
and you board that plane
I promise I will not cry
and I will be strong
for those that need
the strength
for the feeling of you leaving
is just too much to bear
When I come home I will
look for something I know
I won't find
but I will still listen for
your cry in the night
for food or a
clean diaper
even though it isn't there
I don't know how to react
knowing that you will soon
be leaving our arms
and climbing into someone
else's arms
that we won't hear your
perfect little laugh
or your little cry for food
or just you talking to us.
If you don't remember anything else
always remember you are missed
in my heart forever
and I will always love you.


Love always
Aunt Katie
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Best poem I have ever read. Awesome job Katie!!!!! 8)
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I think this poem is good, but you need more punctuation and capitalization in it.
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.





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Awww Katie it's so sweet I love it. I'm not going to even say that I know how you feel cause I don't I mean there going to go to Korea for two years. But look on the right side when she comes back she'll be able to do a lot more than cry or smile. Anyways I hope you keep up writing, I never know you could write poetry so well.

~Chinchilla
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Wow, I love this piece. The first piece I enjoyed on this forum that didn't have any technical aspects that bugged me. The only think you should change is the way the piece is laid out.
Keep writing. I love it. The imagery. the flow, and the story telling ability is superb. Your rhyme scheme is brilliantly laid out too. Bravo! Not just cause my girlfriend has a similar name. :)
^^
Nostalgia is like a grammar lesson. You find the present tense and the past perfect.




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thanks guys that is awesome it is just what i wrote off the top of my head and yes i can write good poetry chinchilla girl it is like my secret hobby
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LEAVE ME ALONE ABOUT THE PUNCUTATION IT IS JUST A ROUGH DRAFT OFF OF THE TOP OF MY HEAD WRITTEN FOR MY NIECE SO PLEASE DROP IT!!! :evil:
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