Oblivion

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Hi! This is my first attempt at Romance. It's a bit bloody though, dark even. >.>" Here you go -- Oblivion!! It's short, though. And a bit ax-crazy.

Please tell me if it's confusing. Enjoy.

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"Hatta!" I shriek. "Don't let him hurt me, please."

I'm sobbing though I try my best not to, because I see how it makes you panic. Even though no one else sees it. Lexa, Chess, Maria...even Raphael, who's holding a knife to my throat. They all think you're still happy through all this, despite me being in danger's path.

None of them see you the way I do. I see the fear hidden in your beautiful red eyes. You're not human, but I am. You know I could die at any given moment, don't you?

And so you fight. You slam Chess into the wall and knock him unconscious with a smile on your face. You allow Lexa to see frightening illusions and laugh when she falls to the ground whimpering.

"DON'T MOVE, STAY BACK!" Raphael pressed the cold steel against my throat. "If you try anything on me, I will kill her!"

I let out a burble of confused laughter as Maria runs away from you. You approach her with a knife, and I hear your voice in my head.

I won't let him hurt you.

And so to everybody else, you seem to enjoy watching Maria's blood spill onto the floor. Raphael's knees go weak. I can feel his fear from the way the steel trembles against my throat..

I close my eyes and I forget I'm a hostage. Because when you're around, you'll never let anyone hurt me. Even though they all think you enjoy violence.

Lexa whimpers as you begin to attack Maria, frightened by the blood. And through your happy face, no one can see how panicked you really are. They all think you're insane, that you enjoy killing.

Maybe you really are crazy. Maybe you really do enjoy killing.

But it doesn't matter. I still want to be with you. I open my eyes and a tear falls down my cheek. You glance at me.

You know I'm crying, don't you? You know I'm crying for you, for us.

Because they'll never let us be together. They don't understand us. They think all we want is the throne. But I don't want it. I just want to stay with you, forever. And if I had to become queen to do that, I'll kill everyone in my way.

I'm your Candidate in this violent game of politics. You're my Shadow. We were supposed to remain friends, but then again, when we first saw each other, it wasn't as Shadow and Candidate.

It was as two friends.

Do you remember? I would sit under the shade of the trees in the forest, and you would lounge in the branches. We would sit in silence, enjoying each other's company wordlessly. We hardly ever say a word out loud to each other.

We don't need to. We're above it all. We're above this world. If it should crash and burn, I wouldn't care. As long as I would stay with you, it's all right.

I'll never see you as just a Shadow, as just a tool in this game we're forced to play.

Maria sobs and begs you through her pain. She says she loves her parents, and begs you not to kill her for their sake.

Love? Does she know love? If she knew what love was, she would die to be with her dead fiancee.

I know I would die if you disappeared from my life. If I found out you were destined to roam the Earth forever, I would make sure I had unfinished business in order to stay here with you, to stay with you in limbo.. And if you were in heaven, I would live like a saint to earn my salvation..

You wince and give me a brief disapproving look. No one else noticed, no one but me. I'm sorry, Hatta.

Don't think like that. I won't let you die.

I will die one day, because human life is fragile. But wherever you are, I will stay with you.

I know, Hatta.
Why do I keep having this scary nightmare...The one where I went mad and killed you with my own hands.

-Loyal AS fan-




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very interesting, but im not totally clear on everything. for one thing, and not to be rude or anything, is this from a girl or a boys point of veiw? Also, if hatta isnt human what is he? it may not be might to be said in your story but i would like to know.
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Ok so just a couple questions:
Is the point of view from a girl or a boy. And second what made they person go crazy and start on a killing spree. How did the character get a knife to their neck?? Well these are some questions that I have. Otherwise It was very interesting, and I like the POV that you wrote it in. It adds a sense of mystery to the whole story. Fabulous!!! :smt041
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I have questions, too. In the beginning, the MC is screaming for Hatta. Who is Hatta? Is Hatta the one killing? Or, is it the MC's friend. Also, is this from a guy's point or a girl's? Maybe you could edit this and clear up some of those questions. Or, maybe for effect you did it like that, you know, made it kind of confusing, gave us questions. I'm not exactly sure.

I did like this, please PM me if you add more.
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