Down Down

Hey little girl, do that thing I love
Hey pied piper, play that tune I long for

Your voice calls me, wants me
It seems so irresistible
Too late now, I’m falling and you’ve
Got the trap opened wide
Not that you needed it, your silky
Smooth voice is enough to tame even me

Hey little girl, sing that song I find breath-taking
Hey pied piper, call away my heart

So is pain please, or pleasure pain
We’re starting to play this game again
Heads are spinning ‘round and ‘round
And I’m falling without a sound
Down down to the waiting ground

Hey little girl, dance away with my nightmares
Hey pied piper, summon away the fears

It’s too late,
now the floor rushes up to me
Only to disappear without a trace
Leaving me to keep falling down down
Into the waiting abyss

Hey little girl, catch me as I fall
Hey pied piper, save my failing soul

Hey little girl, play away the pain
Hey pied piper, call away my heart

I'm not really sure on what emotion you are trying to portray here. Normally a song will make you feel something, but I'm just confused with this. Well, also this is more my opinion then anything, I think it needs to be a little bit longer. Again just my opinion because I tend to write longer songs. Maybe it would be better if you had music to go with it. I think that for some of the songs that without the music also, it's hard to get out what the song is trying to portray.