Look What You Make Me Do

LOOK WHAT YOU MAKE ME DO




Look what you make me do,
Fall head over heels.

I think I like to fall,
The funny way it feels.

When I look into your eyes,
and experience this fear.

This fear of losing you,
Even though your right here.

Just the sound of your voice,
Makes me shiver and blush.

Just a glance at your hands,
Makes me imagine your touch.

Your kind acts of importance,
Even though their meaningless.

Makes me like you more,
Makes me think I'm dreaming this.

Thought of your smile,
Your face,
Or you,

Makes me fall Head over heals,
Look What you make me do.

i love the hook of this poem, "look what you made me do" its so cute and catchy. Explains the exact feelings of anyone who's had a crush! Puerto Rican! hahaha!

Amira15 wrote:Look what you make me do,
Fall head over heels.

I think I like to fall,
The funny way it feels.I really like that line

When I look into your eyes,
and experience this fear.

This fear of losing you,
Even though your right here.

Just the sound of your voice,
Makes me shiver and blush.

Just a glance at your hands,
Makes me imagine your touch.

Your kind acts of importance,
Even though their meaningless.

MakesThis should be make not makes since it's several acts of imprtance me like you more,
Makesmake me think I'm dreaming this.

I think The thought of your smile would work better hereThought of your smile,
Your face,
Or you,

Makesmake me fall Head over heals,
Look What you make me do.Nice repition

Overall
I really like it it's very catchy and sweet a few things didn't flow but those are the things i corrected excellent job

Oh, this was just lovely. I like the way we can all relate to it. It's the exact feeling of being in love or having a crush on someone. And the nice touch of it it: "Look what you made me do" at the end. I really like it when it goes in a circle like that and that sentence is just so... cute and innocent. I don't know how to describe it otherwise.
This is really nice. Well done!!

Love, Liz

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This fear of losing you,

Even though your right here.

Wrong version of 'your'... the correct way would be 'you're'... even though, for this poem, I would use 'you are'.

Makes me fall Head over heals,
Look What you make me do.

You capitalized words right in the middle of the sentence! Not grammatically correct... keep that in mind!

Makes me like you more,
Makes me think I'm dreaming this.

Makes me, makes me... I would try thinking of another beginning than that, at least for one of them!

Your kind acts of importance,
Even though their meaningless.

Wrong version of 'their'... for this certain situation, it would be 'they're'... because it is they and are, so it is a conjunction! Sorry for the lesson in grammar, it's a habit.

Just the sound of your voice,
Makes me shiver and blush.

Just a glance at your hands,
Makes me imagine your touch.

You started both of these stanzas the same way, plus, you are saying 'makes me' again!!! Try changing it up a little, just so I don't feel like I'm repeating myself.

Makes me like you more,
Makes me think I'm dreaming this.

You start both lines in this stanza the same way. Again.

I liked this poem, except for the repetitions drove me insane! xD Try to change those fir me... pleeeease!

[spoiler]4/ 10... like I said, too many repetitions!