A Wipe

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I wiped my face
I got it on my coat
I wiped my my coat
I got it on my shirt
I wiped my shirt
I got it on my pants
I wiped my pants
I got it on my shoe
I wiped my shoe
Now what am I supposed to do?
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Hey, and welcome. Here on YWS, we have rule that says that you should review two works before you post your own. Could you please review some works? Now, time to get on to this.

Very cute poem. 'It' was kept mysterious through the whole thing, leaving everything up to imagination. I can imagine this as a children's poem. However, I think that the last line was a bit too long. I think you should break it up into two different lines to keep the rhythm fluid. Also, one tiny nitpick.

I wiped my [s]my[/s] coat


Other than that, I don't have anything else to say. It was very cute, which is repeating myself. Not much of a review, huh? Well, keep writing. Feel free to PM me if anything's unclear.
There once was a cat.
He wasn’t particularly fat.
Fuzzy was his favorite mat.
And really, that was that.

Oh, but did you really think so?
Keep reading, it’s just the start of the show!
And as for how far this tale will go…
Well, even the cat doesn’t know.



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