my expression

The expression on my face was a sad, disappointed gaze locked. On the spot his figure last stood, I remembered the last of him fade slowly away from my memory. I could only wish what had just happened didn’t really happen. The words that had strewn from his mouth;

Break up?

Separate ways?

Lost interest?

Was I just some play toy he threw in the back of his closet, next to his old Lego’s and Lincoln Logs? Had this all been a game of cat and mouse? I was the stupid little “thing” he played, than he chewed me up and spit me out?

Anger welled up in my heart, but I knew the undeniable truth that I couldn't’t, shouldn’t, and wouldn't be mad at. Love is not something that can be forced by sheer will, and I couldn't’t be upset that he didn’t love me, I didn’t want to keep him from finding his special someone.

I wiped the tears from my face, gave one last hug, and said my heart filled goodbye. We did go different ways but we remained good friends, and I was happy to be the maid of honor at his wedding 6 years later. And he was glad to be best man at mine not 2 months after his.

He was the godfather of my first child and I the god mother of his second, his wife and I became friends, but my friendship with him never shrunk, it grew more and more, we loved having play dates and planning parties together, it was my way of expression to not get mad so many years before, and his expression to stay friends.

So as hard as change may be, it doesn’t have to change 100%

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Nitpicks

The expression on my face was a sad, disappointed gaze locked.

I'm confused on this sentence. I don't understand where the locked comes in. Gaze locked? It doesn't really make sense. Maybe cross out the locked.

The words that had strewn from his mouth;

Strewn; means scatter or spread untidily over a surface or area. I don't really think that it makes sense in this sentence. I don't know... Oh! And its not this; its a period. Or a full stop. Whatever you call it.

but I knew the undeniable truth that I couldn't’t,

Couldn't. No extra 't

I couldn't’t be upset that he didn’t love me,

Couldn't.

said my heart filled goodbye.

Is it supposed to be heart filled? That sounds kinda of funny but I can't think of the right one. At first I thought that she said "my heart filled goodbye" to him. Maybe put quotations around goodbye. Sorry. That's just me.

I the god mother of his second

Godmother. Wouldn't she be Godmother for all the children not just one?

So as hard as change may be, it doesn’t have to change 100%

100%.

Okay that's all the nitpicks. Now for the others.

Description
Okay there wasn't a lot of description, but I think you were going for one of those short dramatic stories so I think its okay. Maybe add more about her actual feelings. We know she is sad then happy but you might want to add in more stuff.

Grammer
Welll.... It was okay but you could work on it. They were quite a few confusing parts in your story for me so you should wok on that too.

Overall
It was pretty good. I think she change from super sad to super nice girl "I want him to find his someone special." I think she should have more emotion. And this goes by kinda fast.

Well, that's it. It was good for your first story on here, though. Just work on a few things.
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