What of Material things?

LOVE THIS POEM!

I love the message, I love your word choice, i love the rhythm it has. KEEP UP THE GREAT WORK!

What of material things?

Do they let you down like you have

to yourself and others?

Are they perfect like you are not?

Do they make you perfect never in fault?

^^^This is my favorite part^^^

Poetry is a great way to get a message across to people in a short amount of space. I think you will be very succesful

I also liked the poem, but I thought that the line "What of material things?" was repeated too much. The rythm was also good and the whole idea of the poem is brought across very well. Nice! Just the repeating that is a bit too much.

I liked this poem. I liked the repetitiveness of the line "What of material things?" You are really good at expressing yourself in poetry, and this peice really gets your point across. I really like the examples and such that you give. I think the ponly problem I found with this at all was one punctuation error.

Matthew wrote:Are they perfect like you are not?
Do they make you perfect never in fault?

I am not sure, but I think that there should be a comma after "perfect."
I really did like this poem, I think you have a gift for poetry.