My bits and Bobs, unrelating to the above styles, I think

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This is a piece of something I wrote today, and when and if the completed work is posted here, this poem will make the more sense, and perfect sense perchance. To give a little more understanding of the poem, I will give the little paragraph that comes afore it.

It came on a time that a flock of seagulls flew nigh the ship, and Eriol*, slumped on a wooden chair on the deck, jumped and looked up as if in some trance. Those of the crew who saw this laughed, and one began in a sing song voice, both sweet and mocking:

"Dost thou see the crying gulls,
Flying unto distant shores beyond this western sea?"

Said another:

"Dost thou hear the baying hounds,
Beside great hunters in magic woods far off?"

Quoth Eriol:

"Nay"
"Seeth I bonny swans of snowy white,
Never nigh, yet never straying from mine eye;
Heareth I their songs of beauty,
Weaving forgotten tales and great deeds in me."

Not very ambitious, yet a critical (as far as I can see) part in the story, well as I see it. What does everyone think?

*(Perhaps someone remembers this figure? And my story will justify the name and character, though it may be discontinued by then).
Last edited by Bjorn on Fri Sep 30, 2005 2:10 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Some help as to what this can evolve to become, any ideas, thoughts? Its really in essence supposed to be a nonsensical song sung by a bard. Kinda like happily doodling away on a piece of homework. Is it ok so far?

Ti-rip-ti-ri-li-ri-li-ri
Ti-rip-ti-li-ri-la!
I sing - this song - with ut-ter glee
Ti-rip-ti-li-ri-li

(Note the r's must be trilled (or rolled) to get the prefered sound)



What we do for ourselves dies with us. What we do for others and the world remains and is immortal.
— Albert Pines