It Was Only Love

Hi! good poem. But I am going to have to say that the last too paragraphs were confusing

Well anyway good job!

Oh no, my very old poem has been necromanced.

yeah gotta love reviving old poems, though

-crit ticket-
(if you so choose)

I hate this poem though.

No! Don't hate it!

I like it.

Ari hath spoken.

*bangs gavel*

Well, my crit ticks are generic, so use it elsewhere if you please. Also, the conversion rate is something like
1 tick = .0642 Yen

The last two lines of the first stanza don't make sense in context with what comes before them... it's a phrase that seems like it should stand alone, but there is no verb *runs around in confusion* Other than that, this first stanza sounds good to me.

In the second stanza, did you intend for the "they" to be generic? I couldn't tell if I was supposed to realize who or what the "they" is, be it eyes or a person. If it's a person, use "he" or "she".

In the third stanza, keep the verb tenses constant "he's slipping" is followed by "he struggled" and it was confusing. The "really" in "but really he's slipping through her grip" sounds wordy to me.

I'm a bit confused how the beginning of the poem connects to the end of it, but this seems to happen to me more than I'd like to admit, so it could very well just be me I like how it all sounds together. I really like the phrase "Miracles would satisfy him" for some reason. The third stanza made the most sense to me, and I think it was a lovely way to end.

P.S. yes, I'm critiquing even though it's rather old, no I don't care. Why don't you like this poem?
*Steals Ari's gavel and hits judges stand repeatedly*

-Amelia