In The End.

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And In The End:
Just a girl stuck in this mysterious world, with no way out if opt ionized.
A girl with many questions that will never be asked, so there for never be answered.
One with thoughts but no visions.
A girl with more pride than you think.
A girl who doesn’t believe in Love but believes there’s a lot more too it than just caring.
A girl who has learned a lot just from one experience.
One who knows everything happens for a reason, and has learned to accept things as they go.
A girl who now will never take less than she deserves or more than she needs.
One who loves rainbows and believes they have a lot more meaning than just color;
in fact they could change the worst day to the best.
A girl who doesn’t let peoples opinions, statements, or rude judgmental comments get to her because she knows peoples opinions cant change who she is.
One who loves rain but would be lost without those rainbows.
A girl who would do anything just to hear an animal speak their mind.
One who doesn’t believe in hatred but does believe in discouragement.
One who believes stereotyping or judging one another is just expressing one another’s fear.
A girl who is learning to let go and give up when she needs to.
A girl who knows what she wants in life, but knows its going to take a lot to get.
One who finally knows who and who not to trust.
A girl who shows her emotions but knows her limits.
A girl with many friends but knows who she can truly count on;
(herself, the very own best friend).
One who has lost a lot of great things in life because her actions.
A girl who wishes you could understand but knows you never could.
One who has taken things for grant way too much and didn’t realize it until now.
A girl who yes has made mistakes, but has also learned from them too.
A girl with a totally different mind than you, and thinks way to deep into things.
A girl who knows to believe in herself before she believes in anything else.
A girl who has over come her fear of self conscience.
A girl you might never understand; but finally understands herself.
Last edited by superboii57 on Thu Mar 12, 2009 1:06 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Hello, my name is Colt.

First of all, the format is totally wrong! I have never seen a poem written on one line like that before. It's called pressing the 'enter' button. Second, I noticed you used a semicolon, be careful with those in poetry. Third, the title is flat and boring. I'd also add more description to the girl. Overall, it was pretty good.
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