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I'd rather write about this world than live in itand I'd rather play music all day and read and wander around bookstoresand watch humansbut not be one of them.
Personally, I like this one more. I think they are both really great but I think this one flows better and has more to the story. It still had that feeling of intimacy between the mother and David.
I really liked them both and I commend you on being so young yet so gifted in poetry. I just think this one is the better of the two, not by a landslide or anything, I just latched on to this one more.
Keep up the writing!
Rory Legend
All you need is 20 seconds of insane courage, and I promise you something great will come of it.
