Don’t Agree

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fire_of_dawn
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Tue Mar 03, 2009 5:08 pm
fire_of_dawn says... · Tue Mar 03, 2009 5:08 pm
This whole Lent season… what’s it to me? I’ve “lent” so much, I thought I was dead. I lost my voice, my last resort. I’m mute.

My thoughts come forward best on the page. I don’t want to talk, not now. Anyway, don't we have a "right to silence"?
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Wed Mar 04, 2009 10:30 pm
Eliza:) says... · Wed Mar 04, 2009 10:30 pm
This whole Lent season… what’s it to me? I’ve “lent” so much, I thought I was dead. I lost my voice, my last resort. I’m mute.

My thoughts come forward best on the page. I don’t want to talk, not now. Anyway, don't we have a "right to silence"?


Considering it was less than one hundred words, it was okay, but it could be better.

You often go from subject to subject, making it extremely hard to understand what you are even talking about.

The meaning is also lost. What are you trying to tell the audience?

Other than that, it's good. :)
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