A Paradox

OK, I don't know if this is more a poem or just ramblings but whatever. And the quotes are from a high school play I saw called "Pirates of Penzance" and those lines from a song kept popping up into my head. I recommend the move "Pirates of Penzance" if you want to see what it's about. It's quite funny.

A Paradox

I love you and I hate you
What a pradox
I want to slap you
I want to kiss you
Do they cancel out?
Do I both or neither?
Are we even?
Is it a clean slate?
Someone help me
"A paradox,
a paradox
a most ingenious paradox!"

Is three the magic number?
Who will it be?
Will I have to wait more?
My patience is gone
Is it worth it to live
I must fulfill one wish before I leave...
but if that wish is filled
life is worth living...
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"Paradox,
a paradox,
a most ingenious paradox!"

What a pradox
Just a typo [I think]. paradox

It was pretty light and had a good rhythm with its tone. The questions kind of bothered me... like a little child bouncing up and down asking the same question in different forms. But yeah... not much else to say.

I don't like it as a poem. I can definitely feel that it was inspired from a song, and often that happens to me and I write things that I think are great, and they are great, it's just that you need the music to get it, and...I don't really know what the music was. With that said, these poems are still awesome for playing around with rhythm.

This was a bunch of interrogative nonsense. Perhaps if you would drop the questions and start using [original] imagery to explain your ideas, the poem would be better. For instance: "I love you and I hate you" is too blunt a statement for me to care -- unless you can make this feeling more 'universal', that is, unless you can back your claim up with examples we can relate to, the words are nothing more than words. Your goal as a writer is to make words be more than a jumble of letters and rules of grammar.