Fantasy

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Look in the mirror,
What do I see?
Who is the person
that I want to be?

This is my dream,
This is my life.
But why can’t I live
In my fantasies?

There’s a world, out there
Over the rainbow
Where dreams flood the skies.
Where hope fills their eyes.

But here
In this world
The skies are clouded by darkness.
Here, dreams cease to exist.

Look in the mirror
What do I see?
Who is the person
That I want to be?

This is my deam,
This is my life.
But why can’t I live
In my fantasies?

I want to be a stronger person
I want to be the one you love.
But how~ will I make it true?
I do love you
But how?

Look in the mirror
What do I see?
Who is the person that I want to be?

You are the one I love,
I don’t want you out of my arms
Hold me forever.
Hold me forever…

I want to be the one
The one that carries you on.
The girl you love.
The one you want to be with.
With you~

No matter how much I try,
You’ll only be my fantasy.
Never will you come into my life.
Sitting here, daydreaming.
You’ll never come again.
This is reality.
I must live to the end.

One day I’ll find you,
Somewhere beyond my dreams.
You’re out there somewhere
I just have to learn to see.

True love is everywhere
I just have to see
That you were always by my side,
You were more than just a fantasy.
Last edited by Angels-Symphony on Sun Feb 22, 2009 4:19 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Hi Shina! *Waves*

Looks like I'll be reviewing you...


Anyway, I thought it was a pretty good poem. In my opinion, it flowed quite nicely.

My favorite part was this:

True love is everywhere
I just have to see
That you were always by my side,
You were more than just a fantasy.


And a nit-pick or two...

But here
In this world
The skies are clouded by darkness.
Here, dreams cease to exist.

Look in the mirror
What do I see?
Who is the person
That I want to be?

This is my dream,
This is my life.
But why can’t I live
In my fantasies?


Hehe. I find it funny when people replace "cease" with "seize".
That reminds me of a time we had to write bills for school, and a person put "Seize fire" instead of "Cease fire". Haha!

Anyway, nicely done. Bye!
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