Reach the Top

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[1ST VERSE]
There’s this dream,
I don’t know if I’ll make it true
All I know is how I want it so much
I may no have backs to lay on
or hands that’ll catch me if I fall
But I have my faith that will keep me going on
And I know it may not be easy,
I know it will be hard
But I know it’s what I want,
so I’ll give everything I have

[CHORUS]
I know I can reach the top,
I just got to be strong,
Even if everything goes wrong.
I know I won’t give up
Cause it’s everything I want, everything I need
It’s the final line that I will reach
I may fall, I may lose
But I can’t break down
No, I won’t break down
I’ll just follow the light that’s guiding me by
The light of my heart

[2ND VERSE]
So I have the stars right there in the sky,
And the sunshine in my eyes
Everything I need is right by my side
Now I know I’m strong,
I'll keep my head up
Nothing will fall apart
You won’t break me down, not now

[CHORUS]

And now I’m in the starting line,
Ready to follow my dreams
You know I won't give up,
You know; I'll reach the top.
"In the end, it's not gonna matter how many breaths you took, but how many moments took your breath away" - Shing Xion




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[1ST VERSE]
There’s this dream,
I don’t know if I’ll make it true
All I know is how I want it so much
I may no have backs to lay on
or hands that’ll catch me if I fall
But I have my faith that will keep me going on i think this line is a little too long, needs less syllables to flow better
And I know it may not be easy,
I know it will be hard
But I know it’s what I want,
so I’ll give everything I have

[CHORUS]
I know I can reach the top,
I just got to be strong,
Even if everything goes wrong.
I know I won’t give up
Cause it’s everything I want, everything I need
It’s the final line that I will reach
I may fall, I may lose
But I can’t break down
No, I won’t break down
switch these two lines, gives more of a determined feel
I’ll just follow the light that’s guiding me by
The light of my heart

[2ND VERSE]
So I have the stars right there in the sky,
And the sunshine in my eyes
Everything I need is right by my side
Now I know I’m strong,
I'll keep my head up
Nothing will fall apart
You won’t break me down, not now

[CHORUS]

And now I’m in the starting line,
Ready to follow my dreams
You know I won't give up,
You know; I'll reach the top.




truthfully, this was kind of a corny song, but with the right tune, it could sound really good. i imagined it going along the lines to something by Secondhand Serenade.




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I like how you havea clear song structure going on. Its important that that is easy to pick out, otherwise it wouldn't be much of a song. I would suggest throwing in a bridge or third chorus before the outro just to beff it up a bit, but it all depends on what it sounds like, which of course we don't know. Some of the lyrics themselves felt a little generic, but you did a good job of twisting them so they felt new for the most part. Nice job. Keep working at it.
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guitargrl, thankss so much. yeah its a secondhand serenade kind of song.. like a guitar song.. you know. i dont know how to explain it:P but thanks I'll try to change it.

and alyssakyle thankss to you too.. I didn't thought about making a bridge because of the third verse.. I though it would be too much.. but I think a third chorus would sound good. THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR THE IDEA=D
"In the end, it's not gonna matter how many breaths you took, but how many moments took your breath away" - Shing Xion



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