Psychosis

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On the verge of psychosis - I constantly lay
To my wrath and disdain - you shall obey
A haughty ,subsequently proud display
Myself I enlarge , adorn and array

Inferior, thou enemies shall become
Degraded, debased and immensly dumb
I shall deprive the poor and endow the rich
It is my constant, obstinate itch

Unterfrau and untermensch,
I smell a reek, repugnant stench
My ego and might have a constant dance
I will have my vengence in pomp and circumstance.

Reproving, rebuking constantly attack
I will arise an Otzmatron and never retract.
The need to conduct and submit me to your relief
I shall ascend and mock your pitiful disbelief.

Reluctant to face the error of your ways,
It matters not , this world I plan to amaze.
Last edited by Otzmatron on Thu Feb 05, 2009 7:57 am, edited 1 time in total.




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One new word, commas!!!!

Beneath me thou enemies shall become

Makes no sense whatsoever.

So, all this really needs is a few punctuation fixations

I do enjoy it, great subject.
You have potential!.
Then I find,
I feel this passion grow,
To face all that's been lost,
It's not too late to give control now.
Got YWS?




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Fixed. Anything else you Yank?

By the way, fixation, or "fixations" is irrelevant , not the word you were looking for.



Why should Caesar just get to stomp around like a giant while the rest of us try not to get smushed under his big feet? Brutus is just as cute as Caesar, right? Brutus is just as smart as Caesar, people totally like Brutus just as much as they like Caesar, and when did it become okay for one person to be the boss of everybody because that's not what Rome is about! We should totally just stab Caesar!
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