Calling Your Name Again

I turn in my sleep
Expecting to see you there
You've been gone for so long
Yet I still find myself calling your name again
On nights like this

Calling your name again
Longing to see you there
I hear your voice
No one is there

Sometimes I feel you near
Only to realize you are gone
I never thought I'd lose your love
Especially the way I lost it

Someday we'll meet again
Don't know when
But until then I'll keep calling your name
Hoping someday you will answer back

So I like the poem, and the idea of it
But it's very repetitive
In my opinion, just say what you mean the first time
It makes much more sense and doesn't lead the reader in circles
When you change it up a little, it sounds better that way
So ya

actually, I thought the repetativness added effect. It made the poem sound more rhythmic, but if you're going to do that, you need to use exact repetativeness.

I liked the idea if the poem. However I did think that it lacked a bit of explanation and detail, maybe you should elaborate further with some of your lines, I just felt like the last line in each stanza left the reader missing something. Punctuation would be helpful to put emphasis on portions of your poem, as stated before. So that’s pretty much it and good luck on further writings!

~JMXO