Charlotte of the Pulverized Caterpillars; VI

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Oh, goody! I'm here to finish what I started!

I loved him. But I also loved spaghetti.

Dude. I died when I read this. Positively died. This. Is. So. Hilarious.

What if it was all a fabrication turned now into a veil that clouded my expectations of a happy ending.

Question mark at the end of this, I believe.

I couldn't bear to let myself give in to such pessimistic thoughts, not just because I'd always been viewed as an optimist, but because releasing myself to become submerged in such hopeless conclusions could only lead to the shattering of my heart.

This is a rather long sentence. Any way for you to chop it in half?

Whatever sort of world that could possibly be, I knew I would not want to live in it.

I like this as an ending...however (there's that word again) I got an idea. To tie up the whole caterpillar thing (which we never found out about, might I remind you) you could mention a butterfly! That would be epically awesome. Her whole transformation from no self-confidence (caterpillar) to comtemplating love (butterly). That would be very, vey cool, I belive. Just consider it.

So. I think you're extremely talentled. I'd like toi read some non-Charlotte stuff just to see if that tone of voice you use is purely for this character, or if it's your style of writing as a whole. So, expect to see me around critiqqing some more of your stuff! Maybe not imediately, though, if you know what I mean. I should probably get reviewing some other people first.

PM for anything at all, even if you want me to look over an edit. I will gladly! I really loved this, and I shall go back and give a gold star to every single installment if you edit! *waves gold stars in front of Hannah's face, then snatches them away*

Congrats, good luck, and see you around!

~Evi

To tie up the whole caterpillar thing (which we never found out about, might I remind you) you could mention a butterfly! That would be epically awesome. Her whole transformation from no self-confidence (caterpillar) to comtemplating love (butterly). That would be very, vey cool, I belive. Just consider it.

Like, so here's how it goes. First of all, I wrote these all as separate sections, but the caterpillar one came in the middle. I put it at the beginning because otherwise the title of the whole series wouldn't make sense. Now, though, with your wise advice, I have a REASON.



<3 LOVE FOR EVER. <3

I will stick something like that in here. Oh wow, do I love you more than anything. :C

So, expect to see me around critiqqing some more of your stuff! Maybe not imediately, though, if you know what I mean. I should probably get reviewing some other people first.

For sure I wouldn't want to hog you all to myself. >_> -shifty eyes-

=D I will hopefully get some time to critique again and get to some more of YOUR work too! Let me know if YOU ever need anything, Evi dear~ <3 We shall be good critiquing buddies!! ^_^ <3

-rushes off to finish editing this section and the first to get GOLDEN STARS~-

-Hannah-