I know some things aren't good so please review it :] THANKS
Sweet Lies
I think it’s about time you knew,
How much pain you put me through.
Each lie breaks me into smaller pieces,
As the trust I have for you decreases.
Don’t know why I always come back.
All those good qualities that you lack.
Maybe because you’re better than this.
You were so sweet before, that guy I miss.
Why can’t you be like you used to?
When what you said was at least true.
Never would you tell a lie.
You crossed your heart and hoped to die.
Your words don’t mean a thing anymore.
You’re not the same boy I used to adore.
When will you go back to your old ways?
You’re lying schemes have got me in a haze.
No longer do you have your charms.
The ones that keep me in your arms.
Yet I still love you with all my heart.
Someway, somehow we’ll get a new start.
I feel hope in my veins when you tell me you love me.
Somewhere deep down I know you’re speaking honestly.
Just how far down does that feeling go?
It’s hard to tell, but soon I’ll know.
It’s up to you to make us last.
Just keep your sweet lies all in the past.
Good. At least I made you smile. Second off, where's the punctuation? Poems actually DO have punctuation, especially if you use enjambment )continuing writing a thought which continues on a different line and ends at a period or pauses at a comma.) Basically, I thought this poem was very cliche, like most novice pieces are, but in turn, who could blame you? You're expressing your feelings, just like I would or anyone else. So as a piece that illustrates emotions well, this poem is absolutely perfect. Nice job and keep on trying!!
