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Wow. I learned a lot about vamps in film by reading this. I like the way you presented your information; it wasn't boring or choppy. You had a lot of voice in there, making it interesting. It wasn't your every-day essay.
But I wish you expressed your ideas more. I wrote an essay (a controversial essay) on Twilight, pointing out the false and weak, the cliche and the down-right annoying, but then I pointed a little of the strong parts and why people like it so much. This didn't have really any controversy. It was just a time line of vampire films (which I get is the point ) but I think it would have been great it you had added your thoughts about the movies, not just them by themselves.
I liked you beginning and end. They drew me in and were appropriate for a magazine piece. Very good.
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