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Winter Dust

anti-pop · 2008-12-13T22:48:33Z

I'm sitting at my window watching the snow fall. Just let the words come to me. I haven't even read through this yet, haha. Don't mind if you guys tear it to shreds ;) Drifting Down, Floating. Flying. Swirls and Twirls Through Cold Air Setting Softly Atop The Roof Sticking To the Window Sill Looking Up At the Sky, The Unseen Force It Stops. All Is Still Outside The World No Trace Of Winter Dust I Pull Back the Curtain, Despondent And A Single Flake Falls

ballerina13

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Tue Mar 03, 2009 12:22 am

ballerina13 says... · Tue Mar 03, 2009 12:22 am

This was interesting but, it does not really flow in my opinion. You could use more adjectives to help. Don't get me wring. I liked this piece alot. It just needs more depth.

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