the tenor of your words still echo in my room

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I've been looking at this poem for about an hour wondering what I can actually comment on. The way you use words is almost mesmeric and I have absolutely no idea how you do it. I guess the only thing people usually pick out in your poems is structure, but I love how this is put together, so that's screwed.

So I guess there is only something pointless left to say like Keep Writing! which I doubt I need to say unless you suddenly have an urge to put down that golden pen of yours.
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*points* What he said...

Brad, you're absolutely amazing. Mesmerizing is a good word for this poem. I loved every word.
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Yes, definitely everything that everyone said...chillingly real...

and the only thing that I can find that you may want to change is the name; since 'tenor' is singular, it should be 'echoes', not echo. But that's assuming that you're hugging conventional grammar, which is an assumption I can't necessarily make.




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What Crysi and Firestarter said...
Who is this for? I have no clue.



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