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I just wrote this really quick, and I am hoping someone will tell me if its worth going back and editing. And maybe get some sugestions about titles? Alright thanx :shock:

Home is like a battle ground
And you are having trouble maintaining your sanity there
Its time to stop the madness
You go downstairs from the safety of your room
And tell your parents who are arguing over who knows what now
That your leaving before you lose all of your sanity
If they hear you they ignore you
You head back upstairs for the final time
And begin to write a note explaining it all
As they’ve been ignoring you and fighting
That you will explode if you have to listen to them fight anymore
But also that if you don’t leave soon you may just start to rot,
From the inside out
You pack you bag
In it you include a knife, some food, and some water
With the knife you can only guess what may happen
You lay the note on your bed
And climb out the window, into the night
And run, far away from your home
You wind up in the field
Were so many memories were made, during happier times
It is then you know what to do
You take the knife you packed
Hold back the tears, and whisper how your sorry it has to be this way
And then take the knife and plunge into your already broken heart
Just because I am the way I am, does that mean I should be discriminated against?




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You pack you bag


Just a misspelled word it should be "Your" not "You"

Its abit odd, but still mesmerizing. Im really not sure what to tell you to work on, because as far as poetry goes, Im not sure what you were going for, haha. But I thought it was good, Im sure some of the more experienced Poets on here can suggest other things.

As far as a title, I originally thought of "Sanity", but when I finished I ended with "Runaway Heart".

All in all it was an interesting piece, keep up the good work!
~*Don't Tear Me Down*~



I was flummoxed by fractious Franny's decision to abrogate analgesics for the moribund victims of the recent conflagration. Of course, to display histrionics was discretionary, but I did so anyways, implicating a friend in my drama to make the effect cumulative. I think a misanthrope would have a prosaic appellation, perhaps one related to autonomy and the rejection of anthropocentrism. I think they wouldn't think much of the prominence of watching the coagulation of tea to prognosticate future malevolent events, not even if those events were related to jurisprudence.
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