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Its hard to find words for my meaning
Or put meaning to my words
But this one's for you

For those who were betrayed
Or those who learned ot trust
This one's for you

For those who loved
Or those who loved and lost
This one's for you

For those who held on
Or those who learned ot let go
This one's for you

And for all those who found it hard to put words to their meaning
Or meaning to their words
This one's for you




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Hi there! A cool, simple poem. Not much words, but lots of meaning. I like the way you twist the phrases around. It's a clean poem, unlike other really deep ones. However, you forgot your apostrophes. For the word "to", (which i have quoted the stanza below) is it a typo or spelt that way on purpose? I'm not that sure with all the poetry stuff. Hah, just checking with you.

writerchic9596 wrote:
Its hard to find words for my meaning
Or put meaning to my words
But this one's for you

For those who were betrayed
Or those who learned ot trust
This one's for you

For those who held on
Or those who learned ot let go
This one's for you

All the world's a stage,
And all the men and women merely players.
They have their exits, and their entrances
And one man in his life plays many parts.
-Sir William Shakespear.




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Firstly, writers are meant to maintain a ratio of reviews:own work of 2:1.

Anyway, I may be being completely shallow, but i don't understand the poem. At first i thought it was about literary troubles, then betrayal, then love, and then perseverance... Please enlighten me...




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Dramma pointed out the mistakes here that I could find.

As the for poem, I like it, but I thin kyou need to add a lot more depth to give it the message you want it to have. I knwo the whole point is that you can't find the words to give it the meaning but there are some ways in which you can say that but also have a message in it too.

Keep writing and welcome to the YWS!

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Dramma pointed out the mistakes for me. :)

But i loved it, it is spontaneous, and fun. It put a smile on my face and that was what it was intended to do, right? It definitly is random though. But it is a cute poem and I loved it. I hope you do more sponatneous writing! :) PM me if you do!




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Well, everyone else has pointed out the mistakes for you. I personally think that more should be added. :)
As your pretty, so be wise,
Wolves may lurk in every guise.




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Well, I don't want to ramble about spelling mistakes. Everyone else got to do that. It's a nice and simple poem. Simple but yet has a very good meaning behind it. I often times have a hard time putting words into my meaning. I like it a lot many be add a little more too it.



Perhaps it is better to wake up after all, even to suffer, rather than to remain a dupe to illusions all one's life.
— Kate Chopin, The Awakening