I'm Sorry

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I'm Sorry.

I'm sorry, I'm not much of a help,
Even at times when you had yelped.
I'm sorry, I wasn't there to help you my friend,
I promise you in whatever way, I'll lend you my hand.

To support and to aid you in my means,
I promise whatever you tell me, I won't spill the beans.
I'm sorry I didn't pick up your calls,
I'm stuck at home studying in the four walls.

I'm sorry I didn't manage to comfort you,
I'm sorry I didn't manage to turn you yellow from blue.
But please, next time, don't make me worry.
You can always tell me online,
I'll always be here for you, and that's no lie.

I'm sorry, I just wasn't there,
Please rest well and do take care.
Just relax and smile,
All your problems will be gone, making it all worthwhile.
All the world's a stage,
And all the men and women merely players.
They have their exits, and their entrances
And one man in his life plays many parts.
-Sir William Shakespear.




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This is really good. I'm sorry is one of the hardest things to say to a person if you have hurt them badly. In the 3rd stanza you broke your rhyme scheme and your pater of 4 lines. For me that made it a little hard to fallow.




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Hi, thank you for the reply!! (:
All the world's a stage,
And all the men and women merely players.
They have their exits, and their entrances
And one man in his life plays many parts.
-Sir William Shakespear.




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first of all
good job.
no offense..
it wasnt the best poem ive evr read..
kinda typical.
but the kinda poetry i write isnt like that really. sooo. :!: lol
but my all time favrite part of this poem was the part


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I'm sorry I didn't manage to comfort you,
I'm sorry I didn't manage to turn you yellow from blue.
But please, next time, don't make me worry.
[b]You can always tell me online,
I'll always be here for you, and that's no lie.[/b]


i actually like the yellow to blue part even though it was a bit cheesey
but the online part was like :!:
my best friend lives in a different state from me
i love him and the only way we can commincate is through computer
:D thank you for showing a long distance relationship
many poets don't show that
"isn't it supposed to be like this? the glory of first love, and all that. it's incredible, isn't it, the difference between reading about something, seeing it in the pictures, and experiencing it?"---twilight



I tell the neophyte: Write a million words–the absolute best you can write, then throw it all away and bravely turn your back on what you have written. At that point, you’re ready to begin.
— David Eddings