Haiku: Insanity

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Skye
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Thu Dec 09, 2004 2:34 am
Skye says... · Thu Dec 09, 2004 2:34 am
Cool and refreshing
As a smooth, cold spring in June,
Insanity reigns.
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Chevy
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Thu Dec 09, 2004 5:14 am
Chevy says... · Thu Dec 09, 2004 5:14 am
this poem was short, quick, easy-going and i liked it...the words flew together well and the shortness of it was excellent considering that you explained all that was necessary to be explained/conveyed in just those three lines. but hey, sometimes that's all you need is that three lines.
anyway, good job...short poems rule.
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looby-lou
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Mon Jan 01, 2007 2:49 pm
looby-lou says... · Mon Jan 01, 2007 2:49 pm
Loved it. End.

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Mon Jan 01, 2007 3:57 pm
Swires says... · Mon Jan 01, 2007 3:57 pm
Nice work - haiku's have limitations and you did your best considering the Haiku limits.
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Tue Jan 02, 2007 7:31 am
Shine says... · Tue Jan 02, 2007 7:31 am
Well done!
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Wed Jan 03, 2007 1:02 am
Crysi says... · Wed Jan 03, 2007 1:02 am
Yay! I'm a huge fan of haikus, as they are difficult to pull off well. Plus, they're so much fun to write! :)

Anyway, I just have one TINY suggestion. Maybe instead of the comma at the end of the second line, you could put a dash, since the last line seems like more of the complete thought instead of a continuation of the previous lines.

Overall, lovely picture! Well done. :) And you managed to fit the traditional usage of nature into it, along with a not-so-traditional observation. I like it a lot.
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