I have to admit that I'm way behind in reading this. I haven't even read the other chapters of the story. However, I am curious as to what this is all about. Would it be wise for me just to start at the beginning, or can I start on this chapter and still critique it for you?
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I don't have time to review the chapter right now because it's 10:00 at night and I have school tomorrow. I can't review everything right now, but I liked it so far. Thank you for posting this for me, I feel like my birthday came early!
-Moony
If I can impact one person, just one, with my writing before I die, then I've lived a great life
I really liked this chapter; it was informative and pleasing to the eye. Plus you didn't ridiculously big words that absolutely no one has any idea to what they could mean. Then there is the fact that it was a really long chapter, again I liked that, and I thought it was so adorable how James liked her. I do wish there could've been a bit more detail on Sudeep and that other girl. Otherwise your characters have completely grown on me.
I may be the only one still following this story, but everyone that's not is totally missing out.
If I can impact one person, just one, with my writing before I die, then I've lived a great life
"You, who have all the passion for life that I have not? You, who can love and hate with a violence impossible to me? Why you are as elemental as fire and wind and wild things..." — Gone With the Wind
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