Young Writers Society

This Poem is Me
BY Adrian

Built from Titan’s ashes
and imbued with His breath,
this is me.

Carried over time
and forced to leave,
this is me.

Sent to live
and made to die,
this is me.

No longer a boy
but now a man,
this is me.

A gift of a poet
yet the mouth of a lark,
this is me.

Made by me
for me,
this poem is me.


***AUTHOR'S NOTE***

This poem was written' in response to the challenge by the original writer of "This Poem is Me." Enjoy!

This is nice, simple.


I think maybe the "this is me" is repeated too many times for how much is in between them. Perhaps you could put them at the end of every second stanza?

i replied to your comments on my version.





Im glad someone tried this for themselves.

I liked it, it showed your personality in just a few well chosen words and that was great. i sort of agree though that "this is me" was repeated too many times. great job

its very nice and simple.

besides for what they said, I think that its nothing really special. You didn't deliver anything thats exceptionally good, but its not bad either. Just not.. special.

Hi,
This is a really nice poem!
I like the rhythm and the short stanzas.
Sweet and Simple.
Great job! (:

I liked it you defined who and what you are. I think the "this is me" has great emphasis on it almost feels like you have to define what you are. When you can say without saying this is me. Sometimes less is better but all in all I liked how you wrote

A gift of a poet

yet the mouth of a lark,

this is me.

Dont you hate it when its back to the workshop? lol good job