The World is a Liar.

The world is a liar.
Because it tends to make us believe.
That our personality musnt be detected,
Our face picture perfect,
And our clothes just the best to be accepted.
The world is a liar.
Because it makes you all blind.
Robots you have became,
yourselves youll never find.
The world is a liar.
Because it never tells the truth.
It tells us what we want to hear,
Not things worth shedding tears.
The world is a liar.
Because it blocks us from reality.
From what we could amount to be,
And who we truly are.
The world is a liar.
Because its filled with make believe.
And all these living people, set out to deceive.
The world is a liar.
And ive realized that to be,
None of these messed up desires will get the best of me.
The world is a liar.
Its obvious to see,
That the world will never change,
Until we set ourselves free.

WOW! you are good. nice poem.

Thanks and can you critique on my other poem too?
Its the one called I love you? Yea right!

I'd like to say this is a good poem. But, I can't.

First of all, I am a sucker for repetition. If you've read any of my works, you'd see that. However, I think the issue I have with it in your poem is that it's overused. And, because of that, it looses any meaning or drama. It becomes annoying.

Second of all, it sounds, purposefully I'm sure, angst. So, I'm turned off by that. If you're going to write things like that then go back and edit it. You'll find you don't need certain sentences and that the 'angst mood' may not be a good thing.

Third of all, I don't think "world" should be used. It implies you mean 'Earth,' which doesn't make sense with the context of the poem. That could just be me.

Adrian

Really good.
But I think that the world lies partly. (Don't be angry it is just what I think)
Still you used really good words!
Great job. I liked it!

Lordgluzman-
lol thanks and im not going to get mad.
I understand that people have different opinions.
And im okay with that.
Thanks again!

amazing just amazing sad thing is its true though...

The world is a liar.

Its obvious to see,

That the world will never change,

Until we set ourselves free.

perfect way to end it

and have you heard of the band Rise Against? if not i think you should check them out cause i think you'll like em

Hehe, thanks!
And yea Ive heard of them, just never taken the chance to listen to them...
Any song suggestions??

yea

Worth Dying for was the song that got me into them
Prayer of the Refugee- ive never met anyone that didnt like it
swing life away- was put on mtv over and over again for several days when it came out
hero of war- my favorite acoustic song EVER
savior- i wish my hands could stretch a little more so i could play this smoothly on guitar
umm... i could go on and on and on

what about the band atreyu?

Wow, Ill be sure to look into them...
And yep heard of Atreyu also...never listened to them except amybe once... I think.

wow... they range from heavy alternative music to screamo so yea they have a variety and i like it all

what about Bullet for my valentine or Avenged Sevenfold?

P.S. i'm listening to Hero of War right now!!!!!!!! "A hero of war, yeah thats what i'll be and when ill come home they'll be d**m proud of me"

Heard of Bullet for My Valentine and I listen to Avenged Sevenfold, I love Afterlife.
And haha, nice to know.

yea i saw Bullet, Atreyu, and Avenged Sevenfold all in the same concert... they are all in the top 5 bands i listen to... i had trouble talking for a week

haha, nice. I added you on MySpace.