"Consumed"

Consumed in my thoughts.
Just scattered and thrown
not quite sure of myself
and my strengths.
I'm not sure how much I can endure.
But I know I am strong.
Consumed.
I can feel that I'm not the person I once was.
But I shall persist and be determined to be myself.

Hi there. A short and simple poem:) Short poems like this makes it easy for readers to read it.
However, I feel there are some mistakes.

kazie wrote: Consumed in my thoughts.
Just scattered and thrown*,
not quite sure of myself*,
and my strengths.
I'm not sure how much I can endure.
But I know I am strong.
**Consumed.
I can feel that I'm not the person I once was.
But I shall persist and be determined to be myself.

**I like how the word was fit into the poem here.

Besides that, I feel that the ending is .. Too sudden..? As in, maybe a better ending would have made the poem end smoothly. Yeah..

*Hmm, maybe you could have put in commas? To make the sentence a complete one? Yup.
Just some suggestions for you.

Overall, good attempt on this one!

Cheers,
DrammaMomma

Consumed in my thoughts.

Just scattered and thrown

not quite sure of myself

and my strengths.

I'm not sure how much I can endure.

But I know I am strong.

Consumed.

I can feel that I'm not the person I once was.

But I shall persist and be determined to be myself.

Nice poem. There are some grammar mistakes. I won't point them out thoguh, since DrammaMamma has already done so. It's true, and I hope that you continue to write, If you have any questions PM me. The best of luck!

Consumed in my thoughts.

Just scattered and thrown

not quite sure of myself

and my strengths.

I'm not sure how much I can endure.

But I know I am strong.

Consumed.

I can feel that I'm not the person I once was.

But I shall persist and be determined to be myself.

This seems good for the beginning of something. Try adding more detail to make it longer: what brought you to that point, your own thoughts at the time ect. ect.

Dude, I'm like so mesmorised its like mind bottling an yeah like what does this mean

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Consumed is a wonderful poem I like how it doesnt scream me, me, me rather you say it without saying it. Now I'm sure theres a word for that lol I have short term memory lol lets go with that I have to say overall these are my two favorite lines

"I can feel that I'm not the person I once was.

But I shall persist and be determined to be myself."

Great job keep it up!