The Lion is a Communist(other side of morning)

A cough fishing up the last tar in my lungs

I remember a friend who asked me once

The lion is a marxist, so send him to jail?
The Lion is a marxist, so send him to jail?
The Lion is a Marxist, so send him to Jail?

:

And as I made my slow progress under the sun

I became estatic with the notion

That we no longer needed a son
We no longer needed a Son
We no longer needed the Son

:

And to that place, where the sharp law could not bear

we waved goodbye and dove for the pavement

With Anarchies and soft Amerika at our sides
soft Amerika at our sides
soft Amerika at our sides

:

And the dark winds of a conscripted thunder

caught us and dragged us to the river

where we bore Witness to angels in the Electric Chair
the Electric Chair
The Electric Chair

:

O but the lord did smile and we laughed

like sun mad children

A wink left us at the other side of mourning
left us at the other side of mourning
the other side of Morning

I tried to make something of it but couldn't make head or tails of what you were talking about. It might have a meaning but couldn't get it. It seems that each stanza is on its own maybe its the way you meant it to be, or they all are one thing am confused. Don't mean to be offensive but your poem is impossible to understand in my opinion

Hey there.

Reading your poem was a tad difficult honestly. But i believe (earnestly) that i made some headway regarding this matter after a few reads and some pondering.

Your poem structurally seems to highlight the individuality and inter relatedness of each of the segments. This is a new structuring which i admit i never have seen before, its a little rebellious too if i may say so.
But you know what, i like it.
Your poem also seems to have a humorous rhythm to it ( that's the only way i could describe it ), while the significance of the political issues of the same are able to come forth.

"The lion is a Marxist, so send him to jail?
.
.
And to that place, where the sharp law could not bear
.
.
With Anarchies and soft Amerika at our sides
.
.
where we bore Witness to angels in the Electric Chair
.
.
O but the lord did smile and we laughed



like sun mad children



A wink left us at the other side of mourning

left us at the other side of mourning

the other side of Morning"

Well, i just highlited the main issues you wrote on.

i don't intend to speak anything about your political beliefs, but it seemed to me that you were a litlle sympathetic toward the Marxist. And while issuing 'Amerika' as an ally in fight against a totalitarian, you show some degree of contempt for them.
also you are advocating the insanity of capital punishments;
but YOU are in search for a better hope than the hope in god's miracles.

Please do correct me if i am wrong. But that is what i could make out from your poem.

yours sincerely
the_vizier

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:'_':

P.S. : I was reminded of 'The Ghost song' by the doors.
"...and we laughed
like sun mad children
A wink left us at the other side of mourning..." this part was so much like the doors.

Hey there.

Reading your poem was a tad difficult honestly. But i believe (earnestly) that i made some headway regarding this matter after a few reads and some pondering.

Your poem structurally seems to highlight the individuality and inter relatedness of each of the segments. This is a new structuring which i admit i never have seen before, its a little rebellious too if i may say so.
But you know what, i like it.
Your poem also seems to have a humorous rhythm to it ( that's the only way i could describe it ), while the significance of the political issues of the same are able to come forth.

"The lion is a Marxist, so send him to jail?
.
.
And to that place, where the sharp law could not bear
.
.
With Anarchies and soft Amerika at our sides
.
.
where we bore Witness to angels in the Electric Chair
.
.
O but the lord did smile and we laughed



like sun mad children



A wink left us at the other side of mourning

left us at the other side of mourning

the other side of Morning"

Well, i just highlited the main issues you wrote on.

i don't intend to speak anything about your political beliefs, but it seemed to me that you were a litlle sympathetic toward the Marxist. And while issuing 'Amerika' as an ally in fight against a totalitarian, you show some degree of contempt for them.
also you are advocating the insanity of capital punishments;
but YOU are in search for a better hope than the hope in god's miracles.

Please do correct me if i am wrong. But that is what i could make out from your poem.

yours sincerely
the_vizier

|||||
:'_':

P.S. : I was reminded of 'The Ghost song' by the doors.
"...and we laughed
like sun mad children
A wink left us at the other side of mourning..." this part was so much like the doors.

caught ys and dragged us to the river
What is ys? don't know what you are saying


we waved boodbye and dove for the pavement
goodbye



These are two typos I found. I'm guessing you spelled America like Amerika for a reason. By the way America isn't soft at all ha ha.
You should also capitalize all the sentences that start on the left.

The meaning of the poem itself was lost on me but I'm not really a poetry kind of person. I like your picture by the way.

thanks for the reviews everyone