Don't Forget

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Hello Everyone!

Here's a song that I wrote.
It's about how you shouldn't forget your purpose in life.
This song represents what I stand for and holds personal meaning to me as a person.
I hope you enjoy it :)

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Don’t Forget…

You crossed the veil because you believed
Never doubting, you haven’t been deceived
But now you’re sitting here…
Thinking about what you’ve become
And you question“Why?”
But He’s still near
You need proof? You hold it dear
It’s in your heart, It’s who you are
That’s what faith is for

You say one time won’t make a difference
Take that drink of beer, smoke that cigarette
But still, deep down, you fear
Cause He knows every breath you take
He knows every mistake you make
But He knew what you would face
He bled, He cried
That’s why He died

Don’t forget…
Cause He’s catching your every tear
He knows when you’re scared
He’s watching for when you fall
And when you fail
He’s reaching out, you’re reaching up
Take His hand. He’ll never lead you into despair
Don’t forget. It’s who you are, His child

Their words, their taunts…
It hurts more than you show
But He wants you to know, you’re never alone
Your journey isn’t over, it’s only begun
The wars, the pains,
The fears are all of the world
Forgive your neighbors and love the enemy
It’s what you’ve been taught
But still, you find yourself standing…
Looking in the mirror, you don’t like who is Looking back cause…
The mirror fogged up and all you see
Is who you’re not
But it’s so clear…it’s so clear
You’re God’s child

Lying awake, tossing and turning
Your yearning desires are made known
On your knees, you pray…
Asking for what seems like the impossible
He hears every word
And that’s when you know, you’re loved
You feel it in your heart, in your soul
You can’t deny what you now know

Don’t forget…
Cause He’s catching your every tear
He knows when you’re scared
He’s watching for when you fall
And when you fail
He’s reaching out, you’re reaching up
Take His hand. He’ll never lead you into despair
So don’t forget. It’s who you are, His child

Stand tall, stand true
He knew what you would face
He bled, He cried
That’s why He died
Do you remember? You hold it dear
It’s in your heart, It’s who you are
That’s what faith is for
So don’t forget…
Don’t forget

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I hope you liked it :)
Cheers!
-thevoiceinside
"Life isn't about finding yourself. Life is about creating yourself."




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Hey,ok, content wise, I loved it
BUT
Your lines are a bit too long for me, and they don't flow that well. It would have been
nice if there was some rhyme and more rhythm.
But not bad :-)




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Hey thevoiceinside!

I have to say i really enjoyed reading this, thoght I think i'd much prefer hearing it since it has a song!
You can't judge the rhyme or the flow as if its poetry because it really does depend on how its sung...

It's so emotive with language you don't always get in conventional songs...I'm an indie girl myself so I'm used to unusual lyrics...and I like this because it actually means something!
Olivia
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I really liked it. This song remindes me of who I am. It actually work out really well as a rock song. I think you should maybe ryhme more. Sorry but I like ryhme. Other wise you did it awsome.
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Remembering your purpose is very important, otherwise, why are we here?
I really enjoyed this! I do agree, some of the lines are bit too long, however, if you were to sing it, I could completely disagree. But to the eye, they don't flow too well, but like I mentioned, the ear might think differently, if you catch my drift.




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It's really good and I agree- I'd love to hear it actually sung. I like the meaning behind it and what you're trying to say. Maybe you could have added a little more rhyming, but it's good in any case :D
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You are an amazing song writer. It's very Bon Jovi meets Aly in A.J. i love reading your work. we have alot of the same belifs.
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