I think the only thing going for this is that it makes you think.
At least it makes me think. Cause honestly, I have no idea what this is.
Is this referring to that 'thing you need to get off your chest'; you know when something is bothering you?
I'm clueless. But then again, it may just be me and my obliviousness on account I'm as sick as a dog...
Anyhoo, try to elaborate on this. It's much too short, and way too vague. Short poems work sometimes; this not so much. I want to have a clear vision on what you are talking about. And try not to use so many eclipses (...), they get very irritating.
Crap, I just realized you were a New Member! Was I too harsh? If so, don't take it personally... If I had a poem you reviewed, I'd want you to tell me your honest opinion, and suggest ways for me to fix it.
Also, there is a 2:1 ratio, For every 2 reviews you post, and can post one piece of yours. The reason why I say this is because I've noticed you broke that rule already. The rule isn't to annoy you, trust me on that. It just lets everything run smoothly.
