My Angel, I was always yours

xGraceex · 2008-09-30T17:08:21Z

Your eyes are so big! I stare at them when you don't think I am I gaze at you with my mouth open But snap it up again when you smirk at me You are so beautiful You don't know how beautiful you really are In my eyes you are an angel My angel But all you see is a failier when you look in the mirror I don't understand why You are my best friend We have none each other since I was that annoying girl in playgroup You pulled my hair I laughed at your strange shoes But you still loved me But not how i love you... You are the angel for me Why can't you see that? Your the boy who lives next door I see you doing your homework through the window I always ring you up and you wave at me And you tell me to leave you alone, chuckling Then you smile that wonderful smile and hang up I sigh and hang up as well, a few moments later Please don't be sad anymore Tell me what is making you so... strange I found the scars on your wrists Red and raw Do you think I'm stupid? Please don't hide from me Don't hang up the phone I'm here I'm here I'm here... Your funeral was beautiful All your favourite flowers You wanted to travel one day... with me We had planned it all - remember? You said it would be an adventure It wont happen now... Why - why ! Why did you leave me! Why couldn't you have told me! Why ... Didn't you think before you jumped? Didn't you think of me? How could you have left me to deal with this... You know I'm not as strong as you You were always the one mopping up my cuts and bruises You were the one who made everything better again Drying my tears with your kisses... Can you hear me? Are you in heaven? Are you trying to touch my cheek like you used to do? Do you know that I love you more than anything? Did I ever tell you?... As your coffin was taken away I couldn't watch It was too much Mum had to hold me up strait I had broke down sobbing Even though I had promised myself that I wouldn't make a scene... Why didn't you ever tell me... I could have helped... pulled you out of the darkness that was closing in around you... But now your gone... I'm so angry With you With the world With everything But then I remember your face and I feel the tears again Unstoppable, piercing tears that drench my face If you were here you would have put your arms around me And would have laughed and called me silly I would have nodded and used your t shirt to blow my runny nose You would have been grossed out and then would have laughed even more... Sleep now, my angel You were never officially mine But I was always yours I was your Katy You were my sweet beautiful Max My angel I will never forget It needs a lot of work - so dont be too harsh! :D

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Sat Oct 04, 2008 8:16 pm

Kiss of life says... · Sat Oct 04, 2008 8:16 pm

aww!This is so sad! I didn't really see anything wrong with it! It is really good! It made me cry! :cry:

So sad! I love it!I love it! I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I love it!I really really love it!!!! It is amazing!Great job! If your not done with it yet then i can't wait to see the edited version! Very good!

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*room falls silent then everyone turns to look at me*
"What?"
~This happend in art class to me.

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xGraceex

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Sun Oct 05, 2008 1:48 pm

xGraceex says... · Sun Oct 05, 2008 1:48 pm

wow thats a lot of "i love it!" lol great review,

i will edit it soon, and i will try to make it better

thankya all for all of your advise!!!

gracey

SOME WISE WORDS xxx
You can't have everything. Where would you put it?
If at first you don't succeed, destroy all evidence that you tried.
I couldn't repair your brakes, so I made your horn louder
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Fri Oct 24, 2008 12:16 pm

.:Echelon:. says... · Fri Oct 24, 2008 12:16 pm

that was so good, omg i cried,

Wow....

you made me cry,
its brilliant....

hope to read more.

Every rose has it's thorn..
Just like every night has it's dawn.

I've matured a lot and I realised it was time to come back.. for good!

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Sun Oct 26, 2008 11:20 am

xGraceex says... · Sun Oct 26, 2008 11:20 am

thankyou

im sorry i made you cry! *gives tishoo* the poem isnt the best i dont think, it still needs work so when i get some time ill try to improve it

SOME WISE WORDS xxx
You can't have everything. Where would you put it?
If at first you don't succeed, destroy all evidence that you tried.
I couldn't repair your brakes, so I made your horn louder
All true wisdom is found on T-shirts

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Wed Oct 29, 2008 6:54 pm

Theodorable says... · Wed Oct 29, 2008 6:54 pm

this was a very good, very sad poem. :smt089

I loved it, but i hated it all at the same time.

This was all emotion and written from the heart. I applaud you. :smt023

You are a natural and you need to continue to write with this type of passion. I absolutely love your work! Keep writing! :smt024

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Thu Oct 30, 2008 3:38 am

Galerius says... · Thu Oct 30, 2008 3:38 am

i have to admit it...this was pretty good compared to your other pieces.

full review coming soon when i have some more time.

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Thu Oct 30, 2008 4:27 am

jcloud14 says... · Thu Oct 30, 2008 4:27 am

Good job. It made me so sad. Is this all in past tense are was it supposed to be like a story (present tense). It was getting a little confusing. Okay thats about all, bye.

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Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:52 pm

100xstupid says... · Thu Feb 19, 2009 9:52 pm

Wow... I feel really bad now

So emotive, so powerful, oh this truely is incredible. I can't think of anything bad, other than the miss spelling of faliure, but that's been said, and I wouldn't be able to find something bad if I really really tried. Incredible, I repeat

"As for me, all I know is that I know nothing"
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