Another poem for my mate

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Nicola
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Tue Jul 05, 2005 2:02 pm
Nicola says... · Tue Jul 05, 2005 2:02 pm
FOREVER FRIENDS!!!

Forever Friends
you'r my friend and that is true,
but the gift was given from me to you.
we went thru moments that were good and bad,
even moments that were happy and sad.
you suported me when i was in tears,
we stuck together when we were in fear,
its really sad that it had to be this way,
but it has reached its very last day.
miles away cant keep us apart,
'cause you'll always be in my heart


By Nicola Bruce
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xMyxFinalxAriax
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Tue Jul 05, 2005 5:08 pm
xMyxFinalxAriax says... · Tue Jul 05, 2005 5:08 pm
Wait, I don't get it... "It has reached it's very last day," but, "Miles away can't keep us apart"? It seemed really forced, and the rhythm was really messed up. It was pretty cute though. I'm sure it made your friend happy ^_^

<3

Angel xx
"This world is a cruel place, and we're here only to lose.
So before life tears us apart, let Death bless me with you."

Love is a flame that can't be tamed, and though we are it's willing prey,
my darling, we are not the ones to blame.
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Rei
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Tue Jul 05, 2005 8:13 pm
Rei says... · Tue Jul 05, 2005 8:13 pm
Yeah, very forced, with absolutely no rhythm. Very bland, and uninteresting.
Please, sit down before you fall down.
Belloq, "Raiders of the Lost Ark"
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