An Unnamed Poem

No, I did not feel too lazy to name it... the name actually is An Unnamed Poem. I am only uploading this to make sure that my account works properly. I wrote it in a manner of a few minutes due to extreme boredom. Any responses are welcome.

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There are times in your life when you can't comprehend
The thoughts in your head, the thoughts of your friends
Racking your brain, trying to think
Unable to swim, only can sink
In the bottom of a spiral, cannot reach up
Lost in confusion, about to erupt
Happiness, cheer, fortune is needed
Depression, adversity, pessimism is bleeded
Spending your life, waiting to see
Your patience rewarded with prosperity
Jumping over hurdles, leaping through hoops
Only to find the cycle, just continues to loop
Thinking it will be all okay tomorrow
Realising the truth, drowning in sorrow
But in the end, all that is desired
Is just to hear those words again

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(Yes, I know that "bleeded" is not a *real* word. But it rhymes, and I like it.)

I loved it, its a great descrption on life and how confusing it can be
i cant beleave you wrote this in a few minutes!
lol yea i loved it, and i always thought "bleeded" was a real word too!

keep writing, your great

Thank you so much!

no probs like i said, your great

That's a pretty good poem to think up in a few minutes! A good name would be "no way out", that's the message I got.

(Yes, I know that "bleeded" is not a *real* word. But it rhymes, and I like it.)

I'm glad to see somebody else who makes up words! That is the best part of language; it is constantly changing do to its creative users.

It was alright. The rhyming was unexpected but refreshing. However, since "bleeded" is not a word, it detracts the reader from the poem. I stopped reading for five minutes to try and figure out if bleeded was a word or not.

Also, please, use grammar! You had English class for a reason!

-Adrian