Public as a Frog

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"Public as a Frog"

it is to my regret that
there's an adolescent
who isn't fluffy
yet nonetheless is as sterile as a raccoon

what a shame that the
poor lad
with all the airs and meanness
of a cat
has none of the wisdom or tasteful content

the
poor boy!
he doesn't have a sticky tongue, good for catching insects
nor can he hippoty-hop
no imperial charms to speak of
yet he is just as public as any frog

Somehow my sympathy doesn't extend far enough-
I still don't want to kiss him
The man who doesn't read good books has no advantage over the man who can't read them.

Go to heaven for the climate or hell for the company.

The clothes make the man, naked people have little or no effect on society.-Mark Twain




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Lol! I love the tone! It's light, sarcastic, and amusing! I love how you compare that poor boy to different animals.

The only advice I have for you is to maybe consider some more punctuation. I think it would make it easier to read. Plus, the word hippoty-hop (hippety-hop?) was a bit much for me.

I hope to see more poems like this in the future. Too often we get lovey-dovey or really depressing poems. Thanks for lightening my day!
It makes me curious to meet this boy who is as "sterile as a raccoon." Lol!

--Anna
"Man needs music, literature, and painting--all those oases of perfection that make up art--to compensate for the rudeness and materialism of life." -Fernando Botero




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great i liked it.It was fantastic great!.But it was a bit catchy And i think adding capitals would be nice but if you think it's not necessary go ahead you don't need them.But there was 1 or 2 mistakes so here goes.




The poor boy!



he doesn't have a sticky tongue,
good for catching insects.



and i hope you will wright poems just like this


good luck!!
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