To an Unloved Rose.

Beautiful ending! I love the way you describe nature and how you are talking TO the subject, not ABOUT the subject.

And twenty Oaks could not possess

The beauty of a Petal.

I like how you capitalize the names of the plants and trees, though I'm not sure that "trees" in the first stanza really applies to this rule. But, then again, neither does "petal" and I'm not complaining about it.

You’re motionless in fog—

Not sure why you need a dash here. You've used it in the previous two lines and with this line you end that collection of thoughts. Why do you need a dash? You don't need to bridge the stanzas and that would be fine with a period at the end.

It's so short that you have almost no room for error! Well, it's a beautiful poem and so I'm going to give you a gold star. Great work!

Thank you for all the lovely replies, I really appreciate it.

I used a dash at the end of the first stanza because it is an adverb clause and should not have a period after it. Although looking at it now I realized the independent clause could be "You're motionless" so I can see why it looks like a complete thought, but I don't intend for it to be. I should have used a comma actually, but I'm addicted to dashes thanks to my hero and inspiration, Emily Dickinson. :]]

running_with_the_devil: (Interesting name there!) You pretty much answered your own question lol...Nature is too cool not to be capitalized. Actually, it's just another thing I picked up from Dickinson. She often capitalized things to draw attention to them or emphasize their importance. I often capitalize nouns if they are personified.

hamerkid2: Thanks, I appreciate it. Grammar is important, haha.

Kaylyn: Nah, I'm sure that you can as well!

chichi: Thank you, I wrote it with other girls (poets, or anyone else who feels "small") in mind. I wanted them to feel loved. Sorry about my capitalizations, I know they confused a lot of people haha. The shorter the poem, the better, in my opinion. Well, usually. That's just me though.

I thought 'Very Emily Dickinson' before I even read your last reply!

I loved this, basically.

However, I'm going to question the capitalisation too, even though you're probably sick of hearing it and you've already explained your reasoning.

Here's my thinking: I understand why you wrote 'Tree' (big, strong tree), and maybe therefore 'Oaks' (although I'm not as keen on that). The 'Petal' is so significant that the capital is incredibly effective, but I'm not sure about the 'Sun'.

I liked how you didn't capitalise 'rose' in the first line, reinforcing the image of it being 'tiny'. Perhaps you could just write 'oaks' at the end, because now the tree can no longer compare to the rose. The capitalisation, or lack of, would show this change.

Anyway, I'll stop rambling! Loved this!

I can't say anything except, I loved it, and great job!!
~M