Logic Overrules Pride

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((Well, to give a bit of background information this came from five minutes of writing and no revisions. It's about my dislike for people who are fake and blind (figuratively) and how I deal with myself when I cross one of them.))

An inconvenience.
That’s all they are. They don’t have control over you.
Do not let them kill your day.
Be logical.
I tell myself.
Disgust fills my throat
As I slip past yet another one of them.

The ones with their shorts so small
They’re almost nonexistent.

The ones with their make up on so thick
You never really see their face.

The ones with their jock boyfriends
Who make it their mission to make people miserable.

The ones who use people like me
To do the dirty work they won’t.

The ones with the fake smiles and cheer
Which they use to turn friends on friends.

I cringe as another glides past me
And she sticks her foot out
To trip me.

An inconvenience.
That’s all they are.
I tell myself.
You don’t have to sink to their level.
I tell myself as I rise.

Do not turn around and throw an insult
Do not throw a book,
A pencil,
Or a crumpled piece of paper.

You are better
I tell myself.
Don’t sink to their level.
You don’t make other people miserable
And you’re not starting now.

So I suck in my pride.
They’ll get it one day,
And it won’t be from me.
It’ll be from the days they lost
When they could’ve been doing something useful
Instead of building their precious social status.
Last edited by Layleun on Fri Aug 29, 2008 7:34 pm, edited 1 time in total.




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i really like this piece it's like you showed me the 30% of reality about the fake people
keep it up!




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This is pretty good. I like the way you're trying to convince yourself that these people are only an inconvenience. However, I don't think it flows as well as it could, for example here:

The ones with their jock boyfriends
Who make it their mission to make people like me miserable.

The last line is a bit too long and disrupts the flow a little, so maybe take the "like me" out? Good job, apart from that. Keep writing!
Matt.




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I like this poem because I can relate to it; people are always bullying me and they think they are so much better than me. But, I can never see how that's true. Maybe they think because they have fake friends and popularity that this somehow makes them better than others but, it never really does. You have to remember that there are more important things in life than popularity and being popular for the wrong reasons is never a good thing. I'm gald you founda way to not let these people mess with your mind and, I'm happy that you found that you are acctually better than them. Anyway, it was a good poem, nice work.
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