Despair.

Why are you in tears?

Is that you been left with fears?

The world is falling apart in your eyes.

As you try to reach for the skies.

You are pushed back by an overcoming force.

You’re on a curse that leads to despair.

Why is the world so unfair?

You wipe the tears from your face as you try to find a happy place.

You grope for hope but it’s no where to be found as darkness touches the ground.

Happiness has all dispersed as you feel that your world has been cursed.

But a new day comes and you are left with hope as you cope with the depression that has left its impression on the confines of your mind.

Bonjour mon amie

OK!

I thought that the metre and the pace of the piece was uneven. There wasn't even a need for it to be so, as the lines were short, and therefore easy to manage.
When concerning rhymes; if you're going to use them - use them well. They seemed somewhat cliché and very forced. "eyes" with "skies" come on man. The rhyming structure wasn't even consistent, which is pretty irksome.

Personally, I feel that line 9 was the only line that you crafted yourself. It was very clever and well formed. So kudos on that. PLEASE make the other lines like line 9. Then you will have one killer poem.


Love
Kris

Oof, okay a little bit a moan from me here, because this is what I usually do under these circumstances. I have a major problem with your stucture - this could be just personal preference, but never the less - your poem has a lack of poetic structure. Stanzas, verses, anything other than just mere lines would create a much better flor and ensure that your readers enjoy the poem more.

You had a good idea here, rather original which is something that is good to achieve in anything, although you did try and cram those syllables into some lines, so it made the flow go off. Such as;

"You grope for hope but it’s no where to be found as darkness touches the ground."

"But a new day comes and you are left with hope as you cope with the depression that has left its impression on the confines of your mind."

These lines seemed strained and tend to put a little bit of a downer on your poems success, especially as they are the two ending lines. You need to have a nice finish to your story to make sure that the readers remember something

"Is that you been left with fears?"

I think that this line needs to be restructured and re-written completely, 'cause the flow of it is all over the place and it doesnt really make any sense, even outside of the poem. Perhaps change it to something along the lines of; "Is it that you've been left with fears?" You know what I mean?

Happy writing!

This would flow better if all the lines were roughly the same length. Also, as I've said in one of your previous poems, you use simple, obvious rhymes, again - tears, fears, eyes, skies, although this did improve towards the end - depression, impression. However, those last few really long lines need to be chopped up. Overall, a good start, but it needs more emotion and detail - why should the reader care about this person you're writing about? You need to make us care. I hope this helped.

Good stuff first. The progressive rhythm is interesting and the rhyming is random in a unique way.

Not so good stuff.

...try to reach for the skies.

...as you try to find a happy place.

Why is the world so unfair?

These several lines I pulled to illustrate a predictable color of paint in your piece. Extend your word pictures. Use impression words to convey gut feelings. Use metaphor and poetic license to create emotional landscape. I’m coming up blank for illustrations here, but if you want I can gather some up. Basically, if you have a word you want to use, get a thesaurus and find the synonym. Even if you are using ‘old’ words, keep it in emotion colors. It could be literal or metaphorical (off the top of my head, a few bands that use heavy metaphorical in lyrics: Kansas, Chevelle, Sixpence None the Richer.) but the medium is the same.

Ok....the main critique is gonna be about the structure (the content is good but undermined by the uneven line length and forced rhyme).
Is it all one stanza? I would personally split the first 7 and last 4 lines up and make them different stanzas as the subject content changes and the lines are longer.
The last four lines are a definate improvement on the rhyme though, the simple rhymes in the first 7 lines are a little bit predictable and eugh (sorry couldnt find a better word ). 'Tears', 'fears' and 'eyes', 'skies' are too simple compared to the latter stages of the poem.
Just a couple of typos:
Line 2:'Is IT that'
Line 6: 'On a coUrse for despair'
I liked the last lines, but I think to improve you need to look at seriously editing the start of the poem to make a regular rhythm, line length and more complex ideas.
Hope this helps
~sday

I think that this poem had little--or no--meter. It felt choppy and random on my tongue as I read it. And it felt as though there was little feeling. It spoke of despair, but it didn't feel like the subject of the poem was despairing, just struggling. But I think if you work on it then it could turn out better.