blissful concerto

it's only because you glanced that cymbal
that my heart keeps beating soundly
with jammed wires and broken speakers
i'm surprised you can hear me at all

we don't turn round in your convertible
the cd player blasts inspiration to
homeless people lying on benches
but we don't look back into the sun

harsh riffs and small microphones make
teenagers cry out to the world
but all you did was play me perfectly
you never lost any rhythm with me

the artist of my late night headphones
was my late morning wake up tune
and as i stare into your rock and roll eyes
i know that heaven will have a stage
and a drum kit, and an acoustic guitar
and space for you to put your arms around me

Hmm, I like it. I especially like...

harsh riffs and small microphones make
teenages cry out to the world
but all you did was play me perfectly
you never lost any rhythm with me

Except it should be "teenagers", but that's just a typing error.
Great work as usual!!

Thanks. Corrected the typo you spotted.

Firestarter wrote:we don't turn round in your convertible
the cd player blasts inspiration to
homeless people lying on benches
but we don't look back into the sun

I think the second line should end with "inspiration" and the "to" moved down to the third line. Just a minor change that would make it sound a lot better.
I really like it though. Beautiful.

The first two stanzas confused me until I read the rest. Meaning I had to read it twice before it could actually mean something. I guess that could be good...or bad.

oh god, musical (good musical) poetry, and lots of it....perfect. Don't change anything....

I say "oh god, musical poetry" because it can be sooooooooooooo cool....man. Thanks. A

I love your metaphors.

Do me a favour and get a collection of your poems published, okay?

It's funny because I have absolutely no idea a) why my poems would get published and b) how you get poems published anyway.

You have to start out by sending them to magazines..or, just write a book of poetry. Find poetry publishers..and well, voila. I know a kid who did that..seemed to work for him.