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Chapter 1
" There's music and there's people and they're young and alive"
The day i met the Jonas brothers is the day this story begins. The moment i met nick is when my life took a turn of events. I never thought taking my kid sister to a concert would make me discover one of the most amazing guys i know. I also had no idea id be mobbed by people, people would know my name and use me for countless things. oh and i for sure had no clue id end up being the talk of the century when i kicked the crap out of one of the biggest pop stars in the world. Yea i had no clue. and before you say anything about that she had it coming. i mean some people just piss me off and she was getting on my last nerves. you probably saw the video and let me clear things up now- i am the one who punched her first and i was the one who won it all. I mean im just a normal girl- i once was anyways.
So where should i begin? I'll start by telling you my name, which you probably already know, Aquamarine Galvan. I know my name isnt really fit such spunky girl like me but thats me- good old reible aquamarine. My friends just call me BOOTS or just aqua for short. I don't know how my parents came up with the name but they like it and i guess in a way i like it too. i mean how many aquamarine's do you meet everyday? 0 is likely. So anyways you probably thought i was some dumb white blonde who goes shopping everyday and ALWAYS get wat she wants. you probably thought i make my self throw up just to stay skinny and that i has FAKE hair. well guess wat- you were WRONG!!!! I know surprising right but thats not me. Really you know h ow i look im MEXICAN for starters and i eat like a pig. my hair has been long for as long as i could remember and i wore "emo" glasses and some call black rimmed glasses. My idea of shopping is goinf down to the thieft store and buying kid shirts form the kid aile or if im really in the mood for shooping i go to hot topic. Man my closet is filled to the rim with band shirts- most you probaly never even heard of. And sure im skinny but thats only bcuz i work out five times a week. A girl can do that right? I have 5 piercings ( 3 of wat my parents know, hopefully they NEVER found out about the others!!) and i loveLOVE LOVE my black eyeliner. i cant live without it. So yea no one saw me coming when they first saw me on disney. i mean i didnt even see me coming. i havent watch disney since i was liek 8 even then i knew it was lame. so why the hell woul di listen to the music on there. Of course i heard of the Jonas brothers but i has no desire to put them on my ipod and listen to them on full blast until i can thear a thing. So when my parents tol dme i couldn't go see pierce the veil ( aband ive been dying to see all year) bcuz i had to take my kid sister to see them i wasnt excactly thrilled.
" But Andy and i have been planning this for months." i whined. mom continued making breakfast and dad read the paper. " i know but we had meetings tonight and we have to stay late." she said. "mom this is so unfair! i had thos tickets for months now!!!" i said. " and so have we you know those tickets werent excatly cheap" dad said. I sighned. it was no use argueing with my parent swhen they had set thier mind to something. " Take the car and stay out as last as you want" Mom offered. "oh goodie" i thought. " maybe andrea will go with you i mean there three tickets and three of you" mom added. i glared at her. yup andy would so love to miss one of the most amazing bands to see a little wannabe rock band! UNLIKELY! "im gonna be late for skool" i murmured. "the concert starts at 7" i head mom yell as i walke dout the front door. Andy, my best friend for as long as i could remeber, was out front in her car listening to her music on full blast even thought it was like crack in the morning.
Let me tell you something about us that you probably didnt know (maybe you do who knows). We love our music loud. i mean LOUD!!1 So loud the nieghbors are constantly knocking on the door asking my parents to turn down the music caousing me to turn it up even louder. If they dont liek it i really dont give a shit. msuc is better when its shaing you insides and blowing out your eardrums and when your able to scream along to the lead singer of you fave. band and they srceam back. Who agrees with me? Anyways that's how we enjoy our music.
" sup" andy said turning down the music so she could hear me. "hey" i said. Andy is the raddest chick i ever known. She always has my back, either when im so f****ed up i cant dirve home or when im so depressed all i want to do is lay in bed and eat. She understands me better then i understand myslef sometimes. She gets me and not really many people do. "my life is ruined. Itll never be th esame after tonight" (i wish i knew how true that was when i said it maybe then i could had gotten out of this mess) She raised an eyebrow and looked over at me, only fo ra second though. "tonights pierce so , how is seeing one of the most greatest bands in the world gonna ruin your life? she asked. i violately pulled my seat belt on and crossed my arms. "well one of us has to miss seeing one of the greatest bands in the whole world bcuz she has to take Joe to see those dumb wanna be rock stars- the jonas brothers." i said. She glanced over at me. "tell me your kidding?" she asked. I glared out the window. "nope i wish i was though." "man dude that sucks" "you can make it better though." Sle glance again at me and i knew she knew hat i wanted. "oh hell no, aqua, hell to the no." she replyed. I turned my seat around and began to beg her. There was no way i was going to that show alone with a bunch of little girls screaming " marry me" or " i wanna have your babies" i hate those girls. i knew those types, "TEENIES" They only know the names of the most popular songs and most likely only likes that band bcuz they're hot or watever. i HATE those kind of girls.
" oh come on andy dont make me go alone ill make it up to you please please PLEASE!!!!!" i pouted and looked at her. " god your lucky your my best friend" she said turning into the skool parking lot. " is that a yes" i asked. she sighed. i smiled. "maybe theyll play again soon- they better anyways" she said. I hugged her and almost made her hit a truck that was parking next to her. "woah- cuz its not like im driving or anything"
"sorry"
" yo thanks for almost killing me you guys" patrick said. " yo pat" i said. Pat is one of my best guy friends. i have ton of guy friends and before you go calling me a slut like some of you did guys are easier to be friends with. there's likeno drama wat so ever. Pat is like a big brother to me and he protects me liek his little sister. hes the guy from the other video kicking some dudes ass for trying to take pictures of me. again this dude deserved it. you probably saw me in the background yelling, " get off him pat are you nuts" not my best moment ill admit.
We all began walking inside and sat by our spot. School is so stereotypical shit ever. i mean you got the skaters, the nerds, the jocks, the dumb popular girls, and the emos and goths, you got the scene kids and the shy kids. the list goes on an dits all bcuz of the cetain clothes you wear too. ive been called tons of things from goth to punk to EMO. so let me clear things up now- im just me! yup thats right you heard it here first folks. im just aquamarine and thats all ill ever be.
"theres ryan" andy suddenly said. I glanced up and saw him standing with erica and he was looking at me " some people never change" i said. ryan kept his eye son me as erica draped herself around him like a curtain and lead him away. "some people are just dicks babe" she replied. i sighed. " hes an ass too, so just forget him" pat said. i looked at him. "ive been trying to just forget him" i said. i watched the back of ryans head and began to think about everything that has happened to us. You probably heard about us. i mean it was all over the news when some shit happened with him and nick. but you gotta understand he was my fiirst everything and im gonna give you the real story about wat happened with him, nick, miley cyrus, andy and everyone else who ha a part in this story. so heres the truth, heres my side of the story.....




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You should have reviewed two other works before posting your own- it makes sure everyone gets reviews and it makes people more willing to review your work.

Secondly- I have to say, it's either your grammar that's appalling or your proof reading!

CAPITALIZE you're Is and when you start a new sentence CAPITALIZE the first word!

When you first open speech CAPITALIZE, start a new line when a new person starts speaking.

CAPITALIZE names, and you have quite a few spelling errors so PROOF READ!

You do all these things sometimes and sometimes you don't!

On the whole your writing style didn't appeal to me very much. Things like :

'so yea no one saw me coming' put me off a lot. It's too slang. Slang is fine sometimes, but you have to use it right. Put an 'h' on the end of 'yea' if you really must use phrases like that but generally I think it's better not to. You need a balance.

I think that this could be a good story and I think (stupid as this might sound) I would have enjoyed it more had the grammar been better but I really do think with some work this could be a really good story :D

Sofi.
'Don't you just love these long rainy afternoons in New Orleans when an hour isn't just an hour but a little bit of Eternity dropped into your hands- and who knows what to do with it?'
T.W.




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hey I liked your story line, but I think you could of done alot better with the writing. You Have a TON of typos and your missing capitlization. It makes it hard to read. You need to go over this throughly and fix the obiouse mistakes and you some of the words you shortened, like "becuz" it should be "because"

Also I was a little confused about the ending where you suddenly started talking about Miley and Nick. :?

I like the name Aquamerian. It remindes me of one of my favorite movies. :)

This sounds like an interesting story you just need to edit it.



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